Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The Line graph was illustrates the average amount of hours of females spent in selected primary activities, by age and education attainment in one year.

Overall, elder women spent the highest time in leisure activities and sports whereas, they spent least time in work related activities as well as teenagers but they spent more time in household activities . Adults are spent mostly equally their time in working and leisure and sport. Educating females spent more time on leisure and sport rather than work activities and household activities.

Adults are spent their most of the time on leisure and sport whereas they spent least time in working and some more time in household activities. Elder women whose age is 55 or above they spent the highest time in leisure and sports and decreased time in household chores with their age as well as in work related activities.

In educational field females are spent least time in work related activities except associate degree and who are in Bachelor's and higher degree whereas, spent highest time in sports and leisure activities. They spent approximately average time in household activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarise the data but struggles with accuracy. You correctly identify some trends, such as older women spending more time on leisure, but the description of the data is often imprecise or contradictory. For example, you state that 'Adults are spent mostly equally their time in working and leisure', which is not clearly supported by the visual data. Furthermore, the report lacks a clear overview of the main features, and the data points mentioned are sometimes vague. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the two categories (age and education) and provide specific, accurate comparisons rather than generalisations that are difficult to verify against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often confusing. While you use some cohesive devices like 'whereas' and 'overall', they are frequently used incorrectly or in a way that makes the sentences difficult to follow. For instance, the transition between discussing age groups and educational attainment is abrupt. The referencing is also problematic; it is often unclear which group you are referring to, which hinders the logical flow of the report. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic phrases such as 'spent time' or 'highest time', which limits the precision of your report. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'educational field' instead of 'educational attainment' and 'elder women' instead of 'older women'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'allocate', 'proportion', 'significant', or 'marginal', and ensure that your word choices are contextually appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. You consistently struggle with verb forms, such as 'The Line graph was illustrates' (should be 'illustrates') and 'Adults are spent' (should be 'Adults spend'). Additionally, sentence structure is often awkward, leading to run-on sentences or fragments. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors in basic subject-verb agreement and tense usage are persistent. Focusing on mastering simple sentence structures before attempting more complex ones will help reduce the frequency of these errors.

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