Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the number of hours that, females of different age groups spent their time on education and primary activities in each week in 2009.

After analyzing the bar chart, it is clearly seen that the teen agers girls in 2009 spent their most of time in leisure & sports was 36 hours in each week. where as, working related activities and house hold shows identical hours between 6 to 9. the interesting think was the age of 20 to 44 shows similar pattern they all spent their most of time on leisure & sports about 30 hours per week and they least time spent on household activities.

Moving on to older women age group, in 2009 they prefer their time on speare activities like younger people .However, the higher school diploma and high school graduates followed same route their higher hours spend on leisure activities near 50 hours, which was highest on other two categories. Moreover, bachelors of degree students like to spent their time on working ,while also on sports about 28 hours per week.

Overall, all females age groups prefer to spent their time on sports and less prefer to house hold activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response provides a summary of the main features, but the analysis is inconsistent and lacks precision. While you identify some key trends, such as the dominance of leisure activities, the data reporting is often inaccurate or vague (e.g., 'between 6 to 9' is unclear). You attempt to make comparisons, but the grouping of data is confusing, particularly when discussing educational levels. To improve, ensure that you accurately transcribe the figures from the chart and group the information logically, perhaps by activity type or age category, rather than jumping between them in a way that obscures the overall trends. The overview is present but lacks the necessary detail to fully capture the main features of the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moving on to' and 'Moreover', but they are sometimes used mechanically or inappropriately, making the flow feel disjointed. The referencing (e.g., 'the other two categories') is ambiguous because the categories were not clearly defined earlier in the text. To reach a higher band, focus on using transition signals that clearly link your ideas and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that builds upon the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'teen agers girls', 'working related activities', and 'speare activities'. The phrase 'the interesting think was' is grammatically incorrect and inappropriate for an academic report. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'educational attainment' or 'primary activities', the overall range is insufficient to convey information with precision. You should focus on learning accurate collocations for data reporting and expanding your range of verbs and nouns related to trends and comparisons.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'age of 20 to 44 shows', 'all females age groups prefer to spent'), incorrect verb forms ('prefer to spent', 'least time spent'), and sentence structure. Punctuation is also problematic, with erratic spacing and missing commas. While you attempt some complex sentence structures, they are often marred by errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that your verbs agree with their subjects and that you use consistent tense forms when describing data from a past year.

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