Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the hours spent by women of different age groups with varying levels of education on primary tasks every week.

Overall, household activities have increased as age increases and from an educational point of view, the trend is static. Leisure and sports and activities related to work can be seen as increased.

In terms of age, work activities have risen from the age of 15 to 34 and then the trend remains unchanged and static up to the age of 54 afterwards, there is decrease in the task by the age of 75. Leisure and sports activities have gone through fluctuations from age 15 to 75 and it has decreased till age 44 and then suddenly increased till 75 and over. Household chores have increased a

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is incomplete, as it cuts off mid-sentence at the end of the text. Because the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum, it fails to fully address the task requirements. While you have attempted to identify some trends, the analysis is superficial and lacks a comprehensive overview of the data provided in the chart. To improve, you must ensure you cover all categories (age and education) and provide a complete summary that reaches the required word count. The current lack of a conclusion and the abrupt ending prevent a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear structure due to its unfinished state. While there is an attempt at an introduction and a body paragraph, the logical progression is hindered by the abrupt ending. Cohesive devices are used in a somewhat mechanical way, such as 'In terms of age' and 'Overall'. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that ideas are linked smoothly throughout the entire response. The lack of a concluding summary further impacts the overall coherence of the piece.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite repetitive and basic. Phrases like 'remains unchanged and static' and 'increased' are used frequently without much variation. There is an attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, such as 'educational attainment' and 'fluctuations', which is positive. However, to reach a higher band, you should aim for more precise and varied collocations to describe trends, such as 'remained stable' or 'experienced a sharp decline'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'afterwards, there is decrease in the task' (missing article) and 'it has decreased till age 44' (preposition choice). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the flow. To improve, focus on article usage and subject-verb agreement. Ensure that your complex sentences are constructed accurately to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.

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