Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the average number of hours that women in different ages and with different educational background spent on important activities per week.

Overall, the women with different age groups and also various educational background spend most of their time with leisure and sports activities, whereas females with work related activities are low. While the household activities are mostly similar across all of them.

The number of hours spent on working is 6.9 in age group between 15 to 19 which rose significantly to 22.1 in 20 to 24 and 27 in 25 to 34 aged women,which then moved around to 27 in 45 to 54 age then declined to just over 1 in 75 plus aged women. By contrast the number of hours spent on leisure and sports had fall from 36.8 in 15 to 19 to 32.7 in 20 to 24 then further declined 27.4 in 35 to 44 then rose steadily to 51.7 by end of 75 and over.Also the time on household activities rose at a constant rate from 6.0 in 15 to 19 to 21.3 in 65 to 74 and fall to around 19 at 75 plus more.

Despite this the time in hours spent by women with less than high school diploma had low time on working conditions such as 10.7 which is less than 16.7,23.3 and 27.4 from high school women, college degree and bachelor's or higher degree respectively.Similarly leisure and sports declined from 43.1 to 28.6 significantly. Also household activities are at constant with up and down from 20 to 15.2 by the end.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the chart, including age and education categories. However, the overview is slightly inaccurate; for instance, stating that women spend 'most of their time' on leisure is not fully supported by the data, as working hours are significant in certain age groups. The reporting of data is generally clear, but some figures are presented in a list-like fashion without sufficient synthesis or comparison. To reach a higher band, ensure the overview highlights the most significant trends rather than just listing observations, and ensure all data points cited are accurate and clearly linked to the categories provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'By contrast', 'Despite this', and 'Similarly', which help guide the reader. However, the flow within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final sentence where the connection between the data and the conclusion is weak. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the student to describe trends (e.g., 'rose significantly', 'declined', 'constant rate'). However, there are instances of imprecise word choice and awkward phrasing, such as 'moved around to 27' and '75 plus more'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic descriptors. To improve, the student should incorporate more precise academic collocations and avoid repetitive phrasing when describing trends. The errors in word choice do not impede communication but prevent the response from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('leisure and sports had fall'), incorrect preposition usage, and punctuation errors (e.g., missing spaces after commas). While the meaning remains clear, these frequent errors indicate a lack of control over complex structures. To improve, the student should focus on consistent verb tense usage when describing past data and ensure that sentence punctuation is accurate. Reducing the frequency of these minor errors will significantly improve the score.

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