Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart down side given information average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities by different age groups and education attainment by 2009 three types of activities is there work related activities, leisure sports, household activities showing information.

In this chart fifteen to nineteen age group students balancing working hours is there three activities and twenty to twenty four age group high sports activities is there compare to those activities next one is twenty five to thirty four is working hours and leisure sports is little bit different furthermore forty five to fifty four is leisure periods is high house hold activities is less and sixty five to seventy four is less working hours is there huge leisure sports second in this chart finally seventy five is less in this table compare to all.

Educational attainment twenty five over is less than high school is least in this chart working hours and high school graduates balanced is there three activities furthermore is some college or associate degree is high sports time moreover is last one is bachelors degree is high working related activities and also little bit is there household works activities

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt but fails to provide a clear overview or identify significant trends. The description of the data is fragmented and lacks analytical depth. For instance, the student lists data points like 'fifteen to nineteen age group' without effectively comparing them or highlighting the most striking features of the chart. The information is presented in a disjointed manner, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the overall patterns in the data. To improve, you should group related data points together and focus on identifying key differences and similarities rather than simply listing figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks logical progression and effective paragraphing. While there are paragraph breaks, the internal structure of each paragraph is weak, with sentences often appearing as a list of observations rather than a cohesive analysis. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often repetitive or misused, such as the frequent use of 'is there' and 'furthermore' in inappropriate contexts. The lack of clear transitions between ideas makes the text difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the ability to describe the data with precision. Phrases like 'is there' and 'is high' are used repeatedly, which indicates a restricted range of expression. There is little attempt to use academic vocabulary or synonyms to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable'). Many word choices are awkward or grammatically incorrect in context, such as 'education attainment by 2009'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description and varying your sentence structures to avoid repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement, sentence fragments, and incorrect word order (e.g., 'The bar chart down side given information'). The use of complex sentence structures is largely absent, and the simple sentences produced often contain errors in tense and article usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which further detracts from the clarity of the writing. Focusing on basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—is essential before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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