Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar graph compares the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

overall, the women average hours per week remained peak in leisure and sports aged from 75 to over while, the aged from 35 to 44 were lowest women who spent in a primary activities. Through the period, less than a high school diploma became highest over the educational attainment by 43.1 whereas bachelor's degree recorded the lowest number of educational attainment in 2009.

By 2009, the women spent most of time in leisure and sports but the number started fluc

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely limits the ability to provide a comprehensive summary of the data. While you attempt to identify some trends, the analysis is incomplete and fragmented. The response stops abruptly mid-sentence, meaning you have failed to report on all main features or make sufficient comparisons. To improve, you must ensure you cover all categories (age and education) and provide a complete overview of the data trends. Because the response is unfinished and fails to meet the length requirement, it cannot be awarded a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text lacks a clear structure due to its incomplete nature. While there is an attempt at an introduction and an overview, the lack of a proper conclusion and the abrupt ending make the progression of ideas difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used sparingly and sometimes incorrectly, such as the awkward transition 'Through the period'. Paragraphing is also insufficient, as the response is essentially a single block of text. To improve, focus on using clear linking words to connect your observations and ensure each paragraph has a distinct purpose.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'remained peak' and 'lowest number of educational attainment' are imprecise and show a lack of control over collocations. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'the aged from 35 to 44 were lowest women', which is grammatically and lexically awkward. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'showed a downward trend', and ensure your word choices are accurate in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. Examples include 'the women average hours per week remained peak' (incorrect word order and verb usage) and 'the aged from 35 to 44 were lowest women who spent in a primary activities' (incorrect article usage and prepositional error). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the unfinished sentence at the end demonstrates a lack of control. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions before attempting more complex structures.

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