Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrateds the average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment in 2009.

Overall, Average hours per week women spend in leisure and sports recorded the highest in this year, whereas other two categarey fultulated over the year but when working and work related activities incresed then household activities decrised.

Look at first working and work related activites women was 36.8 per week in 15 to 19 age, after that slight droped at 27.4 in 35 to 44 age in year. 75 and over age women recorded the highest in the year. at the end of educational attainment in bachelors degree and higher women category at 28.6

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have attempted to identify some data points, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The analysis is fragmented, and several key features of the chart are ignored. To improve, ensure you provide a comprehensive summary that covers all categories (age and education) and clearly highlights the most significant comparisons rather than listing isolated figures. The under-length nature of the response prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. The introduction is present, but the body paragraphs are not clearly organised, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas together; for example, the transition between the overview and the specific data is abrupt. The use of paragraphing is insufficient, as the response is essentially a collection of loosely connected sentences. To improve, use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to create a smoother flow between your points.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'illustrateds', 'categarey', 'fultulated', and 'incresed', which hinder readability. You rely on basic vocabulary to describe the data, such as 'recorded the highest' and 'droped'. To achieve a higher band score, you should aim to use a wider range of precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'declined', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'. Additionally, ensure you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes that detract from the professional tone required for Academic Task 1.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'women was 36.8'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple and lack the complexity required for higher bands. For instance, 'Look at first working and work related activites' is grammatically incorrect and lacks a formal tone. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensure that your verbs agree with your subjects. Practising the use of complex sentences, such as those using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, will also help improve your range.

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