Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the average number of hours per week that women of different age groups having different level of education spent on 3 main activities in 2009 which were working and work related activities, leisure and sports and household activities.

Overall leisure and sports accounted for the majority of the time spent in most age groups, while working hours were higher in middle-aged women. Hours sent in household work showed an increase with respect to the age but a slight decline is seen at the oldest age group. In terms of education women with higher education tends to spend most of their time working while women with less education spend most of their time in leisure or household work.

Women aging 15-19 spent only 6.9 hours a week working, compared with 36.8 hours spent on leisure . The working hours significantly increased in the age group 20-14 where it went up to 22.1 hours a week compared to 32.7 hours spent on leisure. Working hours fell as age goes up and the time spent on leisure increased.

regarding education, working time rose 10.7 hours for women without a high school diploma to 27.4 hours for those with the bachelor's degree. Meanwhile time spent on leisure decreased form 43.1 hours to 28.6 hours with increase in education.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the bar chart, including age and education variables. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you mention the age group '20-14', which is logically impossible, and the comparison of working hours across education levels lacks precision. While you identify the main trends, the analysis could be more thorough by highlighting specific data points more accurately. The overview is clear, but the supporting details need to be more carefully checked against the provided data to ensure full accuracy.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In terms of', 'Meanwhile', and 'regarding', which help the flow. However, the progression between sentences is occasionally mechanical. The referencing is generally clear, but the paragraphing could be improved by grouping the age-related data and education-related data more distinctly to avoid jumping between topics. Overall, the structure is sufficient to guide the reader through the information.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'educational attainment', 'accounted for', and 'significantly increased'. There are some minor errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'Women aging 15-19' (should be 'aged') and 'form 43.1 hours' (a typo for 'from'). While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, the precision is sometimes lacking. To reach a higher band, focus on more accurate collocations and ensure spelling is consistent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('women with higher education tends to spend') and prepositional errors ('increase with respect to the age'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some missing spaces before commas. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and proofreading for minor slips would improve your accuracy.

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