Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates changes in the average number of hours of women from different age groups and women with educational attainment spend on primary acitivities each week in 2009.

Looking first at the higher figure leisure and sports, the figure stood at 51.7 in the age group 75 and over and 50 hours per week, making it the most highest figure. This was followed by women from 65 to 74 , which stood at 45 hours. The figure subsequently fluctuated between 27 hours per week to 51.7 hours per week.

By contrast, Household actvities recorded the lowest figure at age between 15 and 19. It then rose in next every age grou[

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Because the text is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, the overview is missing, and the data is not fully reported or compared. While you identified some figures, the lack of a complete summary and the failure to address the educational attainment aspect of the prompt mean the task is only partially addressed. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview of the main trends and include all categories mentioned in the prompt. You must also complete your analysis to ensure all parts of the task are covered.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response shows some attempt at logical organization by grouping information, but the abrupt ending makes it difficult to assess the overall progression. Paragraphing is present, but the transition between the first and second paragraph is weak. Cohesive devices are limited; for instance, 'Looking first at' and 'By contrast' are used, but the overall flow is disrupted by the incomplete nature of the text. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words to connect ideas and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are spelling errors such as 'acitivities' and 'actvities', and the phrase 'most highest' is grammatically incorrect (a double superlative). The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic descriptors. To improve, aim to use more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'attained', 'fluctuated', or 'accounted for'. Avoid redundant phrasing and ensure you proofread for basic spelling errors, which can detract from the professional tone of your report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. For example, 'changes in the average number of hours of women... spend' is syntactically incorrect. The sentence 'The figure subsequently fluctuated between 27 hours per week to 51.7 hours per week' uses incorrect prepositional pairing ('between' should be paired with 'and'). There are also issues with sentence structure and punctuation, particularly in the final incomplete sentence. To improve, practice using a mix of simple and complex sentence structures and pay close attention to subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage when describing data trends.

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