Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given bar chart illustrate the average the time spend on primary activities by women of various age group and women with different level of education.

Its can be seen that women with bachelors degree and higher with age above 25 spent 27.4 hour in average per week on work and work related activities which is slightly higher than women with some collage or associate degree of same age group. Women of age group 25-34 spent around 27 hour per week on work and work related activities while only 1.3 hour is separated by women with age above 75 for same activity.

Although women of above 75 age spent nearly 52 hour in leisure and sports in a week, it got lest attention from women of age 35-44. Women of age 15-19 spent only 6 hour in household activities and are move focused towards sports.

To conclude, tme amount of time spent doing household activities was depended in age because increasing age increased the household responsibilities according to the 2009 graph. Time spent in leisure and sports totally depended in the free time and other task they have. The chart also showed that more mature and educated women spent time in work and work related activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response provides a summary of the main features, but the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. While you identify key data points, such as the work hours for those with bachelor's degrees and the leisure time for the over-75 age group, the selection of data is occasionally disjointed. The comparison between age groups and education levels is present but could be more systematic. Some observations, such as the claim that household responsibilities increase with age, are not clearly supported by the data provided in the chart. To improve, ensure that every trend mentioned is directly linked to the figures in the graph and avoid making generalisations that the data does not explicitly confirm.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the transition 'Although women of above 75 age spent...' is used, but the following clause does not logically contrast with the first. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'it got lest attention', where the antecedent is ambiguous. While there is an overall progression, the flow between sentences could be smoother. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer to previously mentioned nouns would improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of incorrect word choice and spelling errors that detract from the quality of the response. Examples include 'some collage' (college), '1.3 hour is separated' (should be 'spent' or 'allocated'), and 'tme' (time). Phrases like 'move focused' (more focused) and 'depended in age' (dependent on age) indicate issues with collocation and preposition usage. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'accounted for', 'a significant proportion', or 'fluctuated', and ensure careful proofreading to eliminate minor spelling and word-form errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. Frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage are present, such as 'The given bar chart illustrate' (illustrates) and 'average the time' (the average time). There are also issues with pluralisation and prepositional phrases, for example, 'women with bachelors degree' (bachelor's degrees) and 'depended in age' (dependent on age). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to suggest a lack of control over complex structures. Focusing on basic grammatical accuracy and sentence construction will help improve your score in this criterion.

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