Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given bar chart elucidates information about Average hours per weak women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009. The chart different compares categories and present the data or numbers .
Overall, it is clear that there are noticeable different among categories shown in the chart . In addition, some categories show some fluctuations by following increament as well as decreament whereas for some cases by remain stable .
According to the chart , the first main activities working & work related activities 15 to 19 : 6.99% , 20 to 24 : 22.1%, 25 to 34 :27.0% , 35 to 44 , 26.3% average per hour week in 2009 . The following by second activities Leisure and sport 15 to 19 , 36.8 per hours , 20 to 24 , 32.7 per hours . 25 to 34 , 28.6 per hours . 35 to 44 , 27.4 per hours . The third activites Household activities 15 to 19 , 6.0 per hours . 20 to 24 , 10.0 per hours . 25 to 34 , 13.2 per hours . 35 to 44, 16.7 per hours .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to present information from the chart, but fails to provide a clear overview or select the main trends and comparisons required by the prompt. Instead of summarising data meaningfully, the writer lists a series of disconnected figures, such as 'working & work related activities 15 to 19 : 6.99% , 20 to 24 : 22.1%'. Furthermore, the data cited contains inaccuracies compared to the actual chart (e.g., percentages instead of hours). The overview paragraph is overly vague and fails to capture the core trends of age and education impact on primary activities. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is structured into an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph, but the logical flow is weak. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, resulting in a disjointed text. For instance, the phrase 'The following by second activities' is grammatically incorrect and disrupts the progression of ideas. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the mechanical listing of data points creates a poor organizational structure. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion fails to guide the reader smoothly through the information.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
Vocabulary usage is basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student uses simple terms and struggles with precise academic vocabulary, writing phrases like 'Average hours per weak' (with a spelling error in week) and 'increament as well as decreament'. Words are often used incorrectly in terms of collocation and word class, such as 'present the data or numbers'. There are several spelling and word-form errors ('different' used instead of 'difference', 'activites'), which occasionally strain the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on fragmented lists and poorly formed simple structures. There are frequent, noticeable errors in basic grammar, punctuation, and sentence construction. Examples include 'The chart different compares categories and present the data or numbers' and 'whereas for some cases by remain stable'. Complex sentences are rarely attempted, and when structures go beyond simple clauses, errors in verbs, prepositions, and word order distort meaning, causing difficulty for the reader.
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