Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.0)

As far as this chart description is concerned, the given chart shows the information about average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying level of education spend on primary activities each week.

Overall, it is clear that there are some noticeable trends and differences. Some aspacts increase while other decrease and a few remain relatively stable.

At the beginning of the period, working & work related activities was at certain level, compared with household activities being observed in most categories. However a average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009 can also be seen. By the end of the period when women age 15 they also focus only leisure and sport, when age reached to 75 plus then also focus that factor can be identified by showing that conclusion.

In conclusion, the graphs presents a clear pattern of cnage in with some categories showing growth and other show a decline and stable.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.5

The response demonstrates a very weak engagement with the prompt. While the student attempts an overview and mentions some aspects of the chart, the actual data points, trends, and comparisons required by the task are largely absent or misunderstood. Phrases such as 'working & work related activities was at certain level' are vague and fail to report specific figures or meaningful trends from the visual data. Furthermore, the writing drifts into incomprehensible references to the year and axis labels, showing a failure to properly interpret the bar chart. Consequently, this falls below the requirements for higher band levels.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is structured into an introduction, a body paragraph, and a conclusion, but the logical progression and overall coherence are severely compromised. The transition words used, such as 'Overall' and 'In conclusion', are mechanically applied without connecting coherent ideas. Referencing within the text is unclear, particularly in sentences like 'when age reached to 75 plus then also focus that factor can be identified'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal flow of ideas lacks logical sequencing.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and occasionally incorrect. Words and phrases like 'chart description', 'primary activities', and 'growth' are attempted, but the student relies heavily on lifted language from the prompt. There are notable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'Some aspacts increase while other decrease' and 'cnage in with some categories showing growth'. The range of vocabulary is inadequate to discuss data accurately or fluently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structures used are very limited and heavily flawed. While the student attempts some complex sentence patterns, they are frequently faulty and impede communication, as seen in 'when women age 15 they also focus only leisure and sport, when age reached to 75 plus then also focus that factor can be identified'. There are persistent errors in verb forms, prepositions, and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'other decrease', 'the graphs presents'). Error frequency is high throughout the response.

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