Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar graph compares the typical number of hours spent by women on three type of activities having different age groups and educational attainment in 2009.
Overall, leisure and sports experience gradual declined as the age grew older, similar trend be seen in educational level. While working and work related activities witnessed significant increase for both. Household activities slightly rose with age.Conversly, steadily fell with education level.
In terms of working and work related activities, began with the highest number of hours 36.8 spent by and gradually drop
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence after only 88 words, which falls well short of the 150-word minimum requirement. Furthermore, the student misinterprets the data in the overview, claiming that leisure and sports experience a decline as age grows older (whereas the chart shows leisure time actually increases significantly among older age groups). While some features are initially identified, the lack of completion and factual errors regarding the chart's trends limit the response to a Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text attempts an introductory overview and follows with body paragraph transitions such as 'In terms of...', but the organizational structure breaks down completely due to the abrupt cutoff. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes misused, such as 'Conversly, steadily fell with education level' where punctuation and referencing fail. Paragraphing is fragmented because the text is unfinished. Overall progression is not maintained, resulting in a Band 4.0 score for cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('typical number of hours', 'significant increase', 'slightly rose'). There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'three type of activities having different age groups' and 'gradual declined'. Spelling errors like 'Conversly' also appear. The lexical range is limited and barely adequate for the task, though basic terms are generally understandable before the text cuts off abruptly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The writing demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. There are several serious grammatical errors and missing elements, such as 'similar trend be seen in educational level' (missing modal/auxiliary) and incomplete clauses like 'began with the highest number of hours 36.8 spent by and gradually drop'. Punctuation is faulty, particularly with sentence fragments. Due to the high frequency of grammatical inaccuracies and the unfinished nature of the text, a Band 4.0 is appropriate.
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