Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart shows the average number of hours per week spent by women of different age groups and distributed their activities into three portions.
Overall, presumably most of the women from Educational attainment spent the same hours as women from early twenties to late fifties in all activities, whereas women in their sixties and seventies prioritized Lesiure & sports and the least spent hours activities was work related profession.
Moreover, from teenager group to 55-64 age group ladies were spent almost 27
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely incomplete, containing only 83 words, which falls well short of the 150-word minimum requirement. Consequently, it only partially addresses the task. While the student attempts an introductory overview mentioning the three primary activities across age groups and education levels, the body of the response trails off mid-sentence (‘ladies were spent almost 27’) and fails to report or compare the main features of the visual data adequately. Because the length requirement is not met, this severely impacts the Task Achievement score, as key trends and comparisons from the bar chart are omitted.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows some basic structural organisation by starting with an introduction and attempting an overall summary paragraph using linking words like 'Overall' and 'Moreover'. However, due to the abrupt ending and lack of body paragraphs, overall progression is not maintained. Cohesive devices are minimal and referencing is unclear in places, such as the confusing phrasing in the second paragraph. Paragraphing is incomplete, reflecting an unpolished draft rather than a fully structured essay.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and basic, with awkward collocations and spelling errors, such as 'Lesiure' instead of 'leisure'. The student successfully uses some topic-specific terms from the prompt, such as 'Educational attainment', 'age groups', and 'work related profession', but lexical control is weak. Attempts at less common vocabulary are either inaccurate or left incomplete, leading to language that is minimally adequate but frequently strains the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited. The student attempts basic sentence structures, but the control of grammar and verb voice is poor, as seen in erroneous constructions like 'women of different age groups and distributed their activities' and 'ladies were spent almost 27'. Frequent errors in word form and tense persist, and the response ends prematurely with an uncompleted sentence, causing significant difficulty for the reader.
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