Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given chart illustrates the activities of different age group of women in education in 2009.

We see different age groups are invyin different activities.Teenagers spend more time in leisure activities rather than working or doing Similarly middle age groups are working and enjoying at same time about 27 to 32 percent.Their interest in households is low .The women of age about 65 to 74 are spendymore leisure time rather than working.They have little interest in households Similarly college and school going girls spend more time in leisure activities,they work and do households duties at same time but in low proportion about 10 to 20 Percent.But higher educated women are working , enjoying and at

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is severely under-length, containing only 115 words against the required 150-word minimum, which heavily impacts task completion. While the student attempts to report some information from the chart regarding age groups, leisure, and working hours, the data is frequently inaccurate or vague (e.g. citing percentages instead of hours). The overview is missing, and the summary trails off abruptly at the end ('at'). Key comparisons between age groups and educational attainment levels are largely omitted or poorly developed. Due to the severe word count deficit and limited, partially inaccurate coverage of the prompt's visual data, this performance aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks proper paragraphing and consists of a single, fragmented block of text that breaks off mid-sentence. Progression of ideas is difficult to follow because transitions are abrupt and cohesive devices are poorly handled (e.g. repetitive use of 'Similarly' without logical connection). Referencing is unclear at times, and the overall arrangement fails to structure the information in a coherent academic manner. This reflects the characteristics of Band 4.0, where information and ideas are not arranged cohesively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying on simple terms like 'spend time', 'working', and 'enjoying'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'invyin' instead of 'involving', 'spendymore', and confusing hours with percentages ('about 27 to 32 percent'). Less common lexical items are either misused or absent. The limited range and frequent lexical errors strain the reader and fit the Band 4.0 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structure is extremely limited, featuring mostly simple sentences with frequent errors in punctuation, capitalization, and syntax (e.g. 'activities of different age group of women in education', 'middle age groups are working and enjoying at same time'). Sentences are often fragmented or incorrectly joined, and the response ends abruptly in the middle of a clause. These persistent errors frequently cause strain and confusion for the reader, placing the response firmly in Band 4.0.

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