Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given below bar chart illustrates the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
As an overall trend it is clear that the average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities , on different basis age and educational attainment, in year 2009.It contains three activities like working and work related activities,leisure and sports and household activities.
It contains women from age group15 to 75 over.Bachelor's degree and higher level of women allowed to work 27.4 and in leisure 28 and household activities 15.2.There is highest level to work in house per week is in less than a high school diploma where 10 in work related , 43.5 in leisure and finally 20 in household activities.
While seeing by age (years) people from age group 15 to 19 are quite similar in both working and household activities and 36.8 in leisure and sports.The women age group from 75 and over holds highest in leisure and sports , 19 in household activities and 1.6 in working.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to address the task by mentioning various categories from the bar chart, such as working, leisure, and household activities across different ages and education levels. However, the selection of data is erratic and lacks a coherent overview. For instance, the overview sentence is incomplete ('...in year 2009.It contains three activities...'). Furthermore, some of the reported figures contain inaccuracies or confusion between categories, such as stating that those with less than a high school diploma spent 43.5 in leisure (compared to the actual 43.1). While some main features are touched upon, the overall development and selection of information fall short of a clear, structured summary, resulting in a Band 4.5 level performance.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks clear logical progression and adequate paragraphing. The introduction is poorly connected to the body, and the second paragraph fails to form a proper overview, trailing off awkwardly. Sentences are often disjointed, with mechanical transitions like 'While seeing by age (years)'. Paragraphing is virtually non-existent, as the text is clumped together into short, fractured blocks that do not guide the reader smoothly through the information. Referencing and cohesive devices are poorly managed or missing entirely, leading to a choppy and confusing read that aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on direct lifting from the prompt (e.g., 'average number of hours', 'primary activities each week', 'working and work related activities', 'leisure and sports'). There are noticeable lexical inadequacies and unnatural collocations, such as 'Bachelor's degree and higher level of women allowed to work' (misusing 'allowed') and 'highest level to work in house'. Word choices are often imprecise or inaccurate, causing strain for the reader and restricting the score to Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures with frequent structural errors. There are numerous basic errors in punctuation, missing prepositions, and awkward phrasing, such as 'The given below bar chart illustrates' and fragments like 'As an overall trend it is clear that... in year 2009.It contains three activities...'. Subject-verb agreement and word order issues are common throughout the text. Because errors occur constantly and frequently impede clear communication, the response fits the Band 4.0 profile.
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