Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar chart are given here represents the number of womens in various age groups how much hours they spend and every week how much women spend on varying levels of education and primary activites.
By 2009, 1.3 hours to 27.4 hours per week by women of age from 15 to 75 & over and who's educational attainment( 25 & over ) included women less than a high school diploma, High school graduates, no college, some college or associate degree and bachelor's degree & higher on working & work realted activites. Afterwards from 26.3 hours to 51.7 hours per week by women of age from 15 to 75 & over and who's educational attainment( 25 & over ) included women less than a high school diploma, High school graduates, no college, some college or associate degree and bachelor's degree & higher on Leisure & Sports. 6.0 hours to 20 hours per week by women of age from 15 to 75 & over and who's educational attainment( 25 & over ) included women less than a high school diploma, High school graduates, no college, some college or associate degree and bachelor's degree & higher on Household activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by referencing the data provided in the bar chart regarding age groups, educational attainment, and primary activities. However, the student fails to provide a coherent overview, select and report the main features, or make meaningful comparisons. Instead of summarising key trends, the text merely strings together raw numerical ranges across categories in a repetitive and mechanical fashion (e.g., '1.3 hours to 27.4 hours per week by women of age from 15 to 75 & over and who's educational attainment...'). Important comparative highlights, such as how leisure increases with age while work peaks in middle age, are completely missed. This falls short of the expectations for higher band levels.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organisational structure of the response is extremely weak. The entire body of the writing is condensed into a single, excessively long paragraph that reads like a chaotic run-on sentence. There is no introduction, no clear overview, and no logical paragraphing separating the two distinct data sets (age versus educational attainment). Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, relying on awkward repetitions of entire phrases rather than effective referencing. Progression is absent because the text jumps randomly through data points without a guiding structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on copying phrases directly from the prompt, such as 'educational attainment', 'working & work related activites', and 'Household activities'. There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors, including 'womens' instead of 'women', 'activites' instead of 'activities', and 'realted' instead of 'related'. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and fails to demonstrate the precision needed to discuss statistical data effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical structure of the response is severely compromised. The opening sentence ('The bar chart are given here represents...') contains a major subject-verb agreement error. The rest of the response consists of fragmented, non-finite clause structures lacking main verbs (e.g., 'By 2009, 1.3 hours to 27.4 hours per week by women...'). There is also a punctuation and structural error with the relative pronoun 'who's' instead of 'whose'. The lack of complete, well-formed sentences makes the text very difficult to read and understand.
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