Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given image is a bar chart. This bar chart tells us about the average number of hours that a women in various age groups and women with varring levels of education spend on primary activities each week in the year 2009.

The bar chart shows different age groups ranging from 15 to 75 & above as well as the hours per week ranging from zero to sixty,

This bar chart also tells us about the educational attainment(25 & above) including less than a high school diploma, hig school graduates, some college or associate degree and bachelor's degree & higher.

Among these, womem who has less than a high school diploma spent more hours in leisure and sports activities.

There are several factors shown in the bar chart including

* Working and work related activities

* Leisure & sports activities

* Household activities

These three are shown in different colours.

Leisure and sports activites are seen higher in age group ranging from 15 to 19.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to address the task by introducing the bar chart and mentioning a few isolated data points, such as leisure and sports activities for the 15-to-19 age group and educational categories. However, the overall coverage is very limited and fails to provide a comprehensive summary or make relevant comparisons across all categories. The response includes bullet points, which is inappropriate for an academic report, and lacks a clear, cohesive overview of the main trends. The information presented is fragmented, and key data points from the chart are omitted. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, earning a Band 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The text suffers from poor organization and a lack of proper paragraphing. The use of bullet points ('* Working and work related activities') disrupts the natural flow of an academic essay. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical, relying on repetitive introductory phrases like 'This bar chart also tells us about...'. There is no clear overall progression of ideas, and the connection between sentences is weak. Paragraphs are underdeveloped and fragmented, making it difficult for the reader to follow a logical train of thought, resulting in a Band 4.5.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently lifting phrases directly from the prompt or visual data (e.g., 'average number of hours', 'primary activities each week'). There are several noticeable spelling and grammatical word-choice errors, such as 'varring' instead of 'varying', 'a women' instead of 'women', 'hig school' instead of 'high', and 'womem' instead of 'women'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic topic, these frequent lexical and spelling errors restrict the score to a Band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical structures are mostly simple, with repeated attempts at basic complex sentences that often contain errors. There are notable subject-verb agreement and pluralization errors, such as 'that a women in various age groups... spend' (where 'a women' contradicts the plural verb and category) and 'womem who has' instead of 'women who have'. Punctuation is also faulty, with missing periods and commas. Although the meaning can generally be inferred, the high frequency of basic grammatical errors places this response at Band 4.5.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.