Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph give the information about the average time that ladies in different ages and ladies of many educational levels spend on primary activities in every 7 days.
Overall, when the women are in the age of 75 or above are mostly enaged in there leisure and sports and very few on working and work related activities, the data shows similar for less than a high school or diploma rather than other educational attainment. All are shown in the bar which denote 3 major things, working and work related activities, leisure and sports, and household activities.
As in the chart showing average time women spent in selected primary activities by age and educational attainment in 2009. In age section leisure and sports are highly done activities by age group of 75 and older. And it shows decreasing when the age goes down towards 35 to 44 which is the breakeven point for the task done by the women. Moreover, in teh educational attainment (25 and over), the time spent for leisure and sport is high when education iis less than a high school diploma. And is followed by other as well. But in all household activities stay constant.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by summarizing information from the bar chart regarding women's primary activities by age and educational attainment. However, the development is limited and confused. While the writer mentions leisure and sports for older women and touches on educational categories, the overview is extremely convoluted and difficult to follow. Expressions like 'when the women are in the age of 75 or above are mostly enaged in there leisure' demonstrate poor control over reporting data accurately. Key trends, such as the inverse relationship between working hours and leisure across age groups, are not clearly highlighted or contrasted, resulting in an under-developed response that falls short of a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks clear logical organization and progression. The introduction and overall paragraph are tangled with grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, making it difficult to discern a coherent structure. Cohesive devices are used clumsily or inappropriately, such as starting sentences with 'As in the chart showing...' and 'Moreover, in teh educational attainment...'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak, with referencing often unclear (e.g., 'and is followed by other as well'). The overall arrangement feels disjointed and mechanical, pulling down the coherence score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by word choice and spelling errors (e.g., 'enaged', 'there' instead of 'their', 'teh'). Phrases like 'ladies in different ages' and 'highly done activities' are unnatural and lack precision. While the writer attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary such as 'educational attainment', the lexical range remains limited and inadequate for a higher score. There are frequent instances where inappropriate word choices obscure the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences or awkward, faulty complex constructions. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The graph give', 'leisure and sports are highly done activities') and preposition misuse ('in the age of 75', 'in age section'). Punctuation is also problematic, with several sentence fragments (e.g., 'And is followed by other as well'). These persistent errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader and restrict the score to band 5.0.
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