Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given bar graph delineate multiple age grouped women based on their education levels regarding what are their primary focus at an average each week. The research conducted in 2009 delivers a fascinating idea about women with different age groups.
The given chart is presented in a clear manner so that data can be read easily. The Y axis provides the information about different age group women along with the different education level while the X axis illustrates the percentage women spends their time doing three of the particular things. Working & work related activities, Leisure & sports and Household activities are the three primary areas the research was conducted on.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 111 words. Furthermore, the student stops writing abruptly after the introduction and a partial second paragraph, completely failing to report any of the main features, data points, or comparisons from the chart. The X-axis unit is also inaccurately referred to as 'percentage' rather than 'hours'. Because the body of the report—where the data should be presented—is entirely missing, the task has only been minimally addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text is heavily truncated, consisting of only two short introductory paragraphs. While the first paragraph attempts to introduce the topic and the second attempts to describe the axes, the lack of a body and a concluding overview prevents any meaningful logical progression or development of ideas. Paragraphing is initiated but not carried through to a complete report, making it difficult to assess cohesive competence beyond basic structural attempts.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and shows some inappropriate word choices and miscollocations. For example, the student writes 'delineate multiple age grouped women' and 'percentage women spends their time', which contains grammatical awkwardness and lexical inaccuracy. Words like 'fascinating idea' are also less appropriate for an academic data summary. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate only for very basic communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a limited range of grammatical structures with noticeable errors. Examples include 'delineate' instead of 'delineates' (subject-verb agreement), 'age grouped women' instead of 'women of various age groups', and 'the percentage women spends' instead of 'the number of hours women spend'. While simple sentences are generally understandable, the control of complex forms is weak and errors are frequent relative to the short length of the text.
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