Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph displays the average hours per week spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment,2009 .

overall there three major activities working & work related activities,Leisure & sports and Household activities.working activities are gradually decline through out the year the lowest is 1.3.Whereas Leisure & sports sharply rise tthe highest is 51.7& however the household activites stay steady through the year .

On one hand the women's in eduaction less tha a high school diploma are more interested in leisure and sports with thw 43.1% however in household 20%and 10.7% in work related activities.Furthermore womens in high school graduates,no college are also much involve in leisure and sports but equally participated in work related and household activities, righ next is college and associate degree holder who are keen in leisure and sports activities, however Bachelor's degree & higher educational womens are equally intereasted in both work and sports.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to address the prompt by mentioning the three main categories and some general trends across age groups and educational attainment levels. However, the data reporting is inaccurate and confused in places. For example, the student writes that leisure and sports for less than a high school diploma is '43.1%' (confusing hours with percentages), and misinterprets the data trends. Important comparisons between age groups (such as the peak in leisure at 75 & over) and education levels are poorly structured and incomplete, resulting in under-developed ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The essay lacks proper paragraphing and cohesive control. While there are basic transition words like 'Whereas' and 'Furthermore', the overall structure is disjointed. Sentences are run together awkwardly ('overall there three major activities working & work related activities,Leisure & sports and Household activities.working activities are...'), and referencing is often unclear. There is no clear logical progression guiding the reader through the data from the chart, leading to a fragmented and difficult-to-follow layout.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent misuse of terms, such as reporting data values as percentages ('with the 43.1%') and confusing word forms ('the women's in eduaction', 'much involve'). There are also spelling and punctuation errors throughout the text (e.g. missing spaces after commas and periods, 'tthe', 'activites'). The lexical range is limited and barely adequate to describe the chart's information, causing some strain for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with very few error-free sentences. The response contains major structural errors, including missing verbs ('working activities are gradually decline', 'stay steady'), incorrect prepositions, and poor sentence boundaries (comma splices and run-on sentences). Complex structures are rare and largely inaccurate. Errors frequently impede smooth communication and obscure the intended meaning of the comparisons.

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