Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar charts described how women's of different age group and educational level spent their time and select the primary activities each week.
Overall, majority of women's enjoy sports and leisure. While the women's with various level of education do jobs. The women's with middle age spent their time in doing house chores.
The rise in graph in sports showed women's with over 75 they have less engangements in work and workrelated tasks rather than leisure and sports
The growing girls do same amount of work and household activities and enjoys to spent more hours about 36.8 in leisure and sports. The women of middle age have more responsibilty to do all kind of activities.
The girls with higher education participated in working about 27.4 hours and 28.6 hours in doing sport activiies while the household activities are less engaging at 15.2 hours. The graph shows peak at 43.1 for sports and leisure about the girls having diplomas or study at high school and they have least interest in doing jobs but showed participation in house chores about 20 hours per week.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the charts, identifying age groups and education levels in relation to working, leisure, and household activities. However, the overview is extremely basic and lacks clarity, as the phrasing 'While the women's with various level of education do jobs' is grammatically awkward and poorly connected. Furthermore, the selection of data is inconsistent, and several interpretations are confused, such as mixing up the trends for age groups and education levels in the final paragraph. While some specific data points (like 36.8 and 27.4 hours) are cited accurately from the prompt, the lack of a coherent and well-developed overview limits the score to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The essay is divided into short paragraphs, but the organization and progression of ideas are severely hampered by poor cohesion and a lack of logical transitions. Sentences within paragraphs often jump abruptly between age-related data and educational attainment without clear signposting. For example, moving directly from general sports engagement into specific age categories and then into higher education creates a disjointed reading experience. Paragraphing is attempted, but cohesive devices are either absent, repetitive, or mechanically forced, resulting in a low score of 4.5 for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and frequently repetitive ('women's', 'spent their time', 'activities'). There are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'women's of different age group', 'engangements', 'growing girls', and 'studying at high school'. Less common vocabulary is attempted awkwardly, resulting in unnatural phrasing like 'least interest in doing jobs'. Because lexical errors occur constantly and frequently impede natural communication, the vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate, fitting the Band 5.0 profile.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement ('the women's with middle age spent', 'women of middle age have'), incorrect prepositions ('in doing house chores', 'at 43.1 for sports'), and faulty article usage ('The rise in graph'). Complex sentence structures are rare and almost always contain errors or awkward phrasing (e.g., 'The rise in graph in sports showed women's with over 75 they have less engangements'). Simple sentences also feature basic errors, leading to frequent difficulties for the reader, which aligns with a Band 4.5 score.
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