Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph depicts the average number of hours that females in different age ranges and women with various levels of education used on major activities throughout the week.

Regarding the educational attainment, leisure and sports recorded the highest compared to the other activities in less than a high school diploma, which was 43.1 hours. High school graduates with no collage women urtilized almost same amount of hours in household activities and working and work related activities. Some collage or associated degree female learners spent 16.7 hours in houshold activities, making it the least preferred category. 27.4 and 28.6 hours female stuends who are in bachelor's degree and higher used in working and work related activities and leisure and sports, respectively.

Turning to the age group, in 75 and over, the highest amount of women allocated their time in leisure and sports, which was 51.7 hours. Working and work related activities comprised 1.3 hours. In 65 to 74, Working and work related activities spending hours minmally inclined, with 6.9. 25 to 34 age group females invested neraby same number of hours in leisure and sports and working and work related activities.

Overall, the largest amount of hours utilised in free and sports activities by women in the all ages. Working and work related activities ranked first in the bachelor's degree and higher degree females.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover both main categories (educational attainment and age groups), selecting several relevant features and data points from the chart (such as the 43.1 hours for leisure with less than a high school diploma, and the 51.7 hours for the 75 and over age group). However, the response suffers from significant structural and interpretive limitations. There is no clear, distinct overview paragraph that highlights the overarching trends (for instance, that leisure generally increases with age, whereas working hours peak in mid-adulthood). Furthermore, several sentences contain awkward phrasing or imprecise data extraction, making it difficult to fully grasp the comparisons being made. It meets the criteria for Band 5 by addressing the task partially with some key features presented, but lacks the clear development and overview required for higher bands.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay is divided into four paragraphs, including an introduction and a brief concluding paragraph, which shows an attempt at overall organisation. However, the logical progression within paragraphs is frequently disrupted by abrupt shifts between data points and confusing sentence structures. For example, the sentence starting with "High school graduates with no collage women urtilized..." lacks smooth transitions. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate or repetitious, with referencing not always clear (e.g., "the highest amount of women allocated their time"). Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion requires better linking to guide the reader seamlessly through the comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with several spelling errors ("collage" instead of college, "urtilized" instead of utilized, "minmally", "neraby", "stuends"). While the student attempts some less common vocabulary related to the prompt (e.g., "educational attainment", "preferred category"), word choice and collocations are often unnatural or inaccurate (e.g., "used on major activities", "spending hours minmally inclined"). The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, but errors in spelling and word formation cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues, incorrect prepositions, and awkward clause structures (e.g., "leisure and sports recorded the highest compared to the other activities in less than a high school diploma" and "27.4 and 28.6 hours female stuends who are in bachelor's degree and higher used in..."). Punctuation and sentence formulation frequently impede smooth communication, placing this response firmly in the Band 5 category for grammar.

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