Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart below illustrates the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week. overview women are age between 15 to 19 most the doing activities leisure and sports approximately 40 hours per week. The women are old 75 and over the age most activities leisure and sports or household and non of this work related activities . The women aged between 20 to 24 are most activities leisure and sports ratio 32.7 and other activities household working is very less than working or work related activities. The women aged between 45 to 54 old the doing leisure and sports activities ratio are 32.2 and approximately the per week 35 hours.The women aged between 65 to 74 the ratio of leisure sports are very maximum than the ratio of work related activities. Which students are less than high school diploma most the activities leisure and sports the ratio are approximately 43.1 than the ratio of work related activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response responds to the task only minimally and fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words (the student wrote 149 words, and 24 of those were copied directly from the prompt). While the student attempts to report some figures from the chart, such as 32.7 for leisure and sports among 20-to-24-year-olds and 43.1 for education levels, the data is presented in a fragmented, highly disorganised manner. Key features are not adequately summarised, and comparisons are confused or incomplete. Furthermore, the inclusion of text copied directly from the prompt fails to contribute to the task content, leaving the overall response underdeveloped and tangential to a proper academic overview.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
Information and ideas are not arranged coherently, resulting in a text that lacks overall progression or logical structure. There are no proper paragraphs; the entire response is written as a single, dense block of text with abrupt transitions between sentences, such as 'overview women are age between...' and 'Which students are less than...'. Cohesive devices are either entirely missing or misused, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information or understand how different data points relate to one another.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on words directly extracted from the prompt or simple terms like 'activities', 'leisure', 'sports', and 'ratio'. There are frequent errors in word choice, collocation, and word formation, such as 'most the doing activities' and 'very maximum'. These lexical inadequacies strain the reader and reflect a limited vocabulary that is barely adequate for the task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting almost entirely of poorly constructed simple sentences with frequent structural errors. There are constant issues with verb forms, tense consistency, missing auxiliary verbs, and incorrect prepositions or clause structures, as seen in 'The women are old 75 and over the age most activities leisure and sports' and 'The women aged between 65 to 74 the ratio of leisure sports are very maximum than the ratio of work related activities'. These frequent errors severely distort meaning and cause significant difficulty for the reader.
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