Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

summary of primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009 is as below

1 Between age 15 to 19 devotes 6% time in household activities ,36.8% in Leisure & activities and rest of time in working & work related activities

2. Between age 20 to 24 devotes 10% time in household activities ,32.7% in Leisure & activities and rest of time in working & work related activities

3. Between age 25 to 34 devotes 13.2% time in household activities ,28.6% in Leisure & activities and rest of time in working & work related activities that is 27%

4. Between age 35 to 44 devotes 16.7% time in household activities ,27.4% in Leisure & activities and rest of time in working & work related activities that is 26.3%

5 .Between age 45 to 54 devotes 17.3% time in household activities 32.2% in Leisure & activities and rest of time in working & work related activities that is 27.3%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response only partially addresses the task and falls short of the minimum length requirement, containing 149 words when at least 150 words are required. Furthermore, the report is incomplete as it cuts off after the fifth age group, failing to cover the remaining age brackets and the entire educational attainment section of the chart. Instead of a cohesive summary with an overview, the student presents a fragmented, bulleted list of isolated data points without a proper introduction or conclusion. While the writer attempts to report percentages, some figures are miscalculated or misinterpreted as percentages rather than hours per week, reflecting a minimal and tangential response to the prompt's requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Information and ideas are not arranged in a coherent manner suitable for an academic report. The text is structured as a numbered list rather than paragraphs with logical organization and progression. There is an absence of an introduction, an overview, and a concluding summary. Cohesive devices are largely missing, and the referencing between items feels mechanical and repetitive, with each point starting with a similar formulaic structure. The lack of proper paragraphing and a clear overall structure prevents the response from developing a logical flow, keeping the organizational quality at a basic level.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, heavily relying on lifted phrases from the prompt such as 'household activities', 'Leisure & activities', and 'working & work related activities'. There is limited lexical range deployed to describe data trends, and the misuse of percentage symbols '%' for absolute hour values reveals inaccuracies in word and data interpretation. While the vocabulary is sufficient to communicate basic data points, the frequent recycling of the same structural phrases and lack of flexible descriptive language restricts the lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting almost entirely of fragmented, incomplete clauses rather than full sentences. There is a persistent omission of subjects and necessary articles, such as writing 'Between age 15 to 19' instead of 'Individuals aged 15 to 19' or 'Women aged between 15 and 19'. Verb forms and prepositions are frequently mishandled within the structural patterns. Although simple data comparisons are attempted, the frequent absence of main verbs and accurate clause structures results in frequent errors that cause difficulty for the reader and prevent fluent comprehension.

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