Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates how women spent their time on various activities in a week, and it compares these figures by age and educational status in 2009.

Overall, women predominantly spent their time on leisure and sport irrespect of age and educational attainment. This interest reduced with increasing education level.

women spending time on work and work related activities incerased with age upto 25 to 34 years; it remained

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The opening identifies the chart’s subject and comparison groups, and the overview correctly notes that leisure is generally a major activity. However, the response is far too incomplete to summarise the chart: it gives no supporting figures and stops mid-sentence after “it remained,” leaving the work trend unfinished. The claim that leisure “reduced with increasing education level” is broadly supported, but the response omits key contrasts, such as leisure rising to 51.7 hours among women aged 75 and over, while work peaks around 27 hours in the middle age groups and household activity generally increases with age. The required minimum of 150 words is not met. Develop a complete overview and report several accurate comparisons across both groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic sequence: an introductory sentence is followed by an overview and then an attempted detail sentence. This gives the reader some sense of the intended organisation. However, the response ends abruptly at “it remained,” so the final idea is incomplete and there is no developed progression through the chart’s age and education categories. The overview’s two claims are placed together, but the relationship between them is not explained, and no comparisons or examples connect the statements. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs for the overview and key details, then organise the details by age and educational attainment. Complete each sentence and use clear links such as “by contrast” or “among women with higher qualifications” where they genuinely clarify comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “activities,” “age,” “educational status,” “leisure and sport,” and “work and work related activities.” These choices make the topic recognisable, and “predominantly” is an appropriate attempt at a more precise summary word. However, the range is limited by the very short response, and several noticeable spelling or word-form errors weaken control: “irrespect,” “incerased,” and “upto.” “Interest” is also not the best word for time spent on an activity; “time devoted to leisure” would be more accurate. Aim for precise terms such as “hours,” “household activities,” and “educational attainment,” and check spelling and standard forms before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The opening sentence is a clear, complete simple sentence, and the overview attempts a more complex statement with “with increasing education level.” The unfinished final sentence, however, shows limited control of sentence completion: “women spending time on work … incerased with age upto 25 to 34 years; it remained” has no completed second clause. The overview also begins with a lower-case “women” after a full stop, and the sentence structures are mostly simple, with little variety demonstrated. Build accurate comparisons using complete clauses—for example, “Work-related hours rose until the 25–34 age group, then remained broadly stable through age 54.” Check capitalization and punctuation, and ensure that every sentence has a finished grammatical structure.

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