Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The supplied bar chart compares the proportion of women with diffrent levels of knowladge spend on activities per week between many age groups in 2009.

As a general trend, leisure and sports consituted a large proportion in every age groups, while work related activites accounted for a tiny franction.

75At the first glance, it is clear that 75 & over age woman spending largest time on lesiure and sport activies, standing exactly at 57.7%. This was followed by 65 to 74 age woman, which made up roughly one half of total.

In contrast, the figure for working activities in age of woman in 15 to 19 was almost identical to 65 to 75, both at around 6.9 percentage. Meanwhile, household activies lowest in first age group.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies leisure as a prominent activity and notes that household activity is lowest for the youngest group, but it only partially addresses the chart. It focuses almost entirely on age groups and omits the educational-attainment data, as well as most comparisons across the age categories. Several figures are inaccurate or mislabelled: the oldest group spends 51.7 hours per week on leisure, not 57.7%, and the chart reports hours rather than percentages. The overview also incorrectly describes work as a “tiny fraction” across all groups; working time reaches about 27 hours for several middle-aged groups. The response is below the required 150 words, leaving the report especially underdeveloped. Include both chart sections, use the correct units, and select key highs, lows and trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by a general trend and then a few comparisons. Linking phrases such as “As a general trend” and “In contrast” help signal relationships. However, the report has little overall progression because it does not systematically compare the age groups or address educational attainment, and the final paragraph ends without a concluding overview. Some references are unclear, particularly “This was followed by 65 to 74 age woman,” where the comparison is not expressed precisely. The stray “75” before “At the first glance” also interrupts the flow. Group the main trends into clear paragraphs and use explicit comparisons to guide the reader through the chart.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “leisure and sports,” “work related activities,” and “household activities,” and attempts phrases such as “constituted a large proportion.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate for this task. “Proportion” and “percentage” are unsuitable because the chart gives hours per week; “levels of knowledge” does not describe educational attainment, and “tiny fraction” overstates the pattern. Spelling errors such as “diffrent,” “knowladge,” “consituted,” and “activies” are noticeable and can distract the reader. Use precise terms from the chart, such as “educational attainment” and “hours spent,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response communicates a few basic comparisons, and it attempts a range of sentence openings, including “As a general trend” and “In contrast.” However, the sentence structures are mostly simple, and errors in agreement, articles and verb forms occur frequently enough to make some sentences awkward. For example, “in every age groups” should use a singular noun after “every,” while “75 & over age woman spending” lacks a correctly formed verb phrase and article. “The figure for working activities in age of woman in 15 to 19” is also difficult to follow because the grammatical relationships are unclear. Practise building accurate comparison sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “Women aged 75 and over spent the most time on leisure.”

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