Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this graph show the average of womans in working nd work related activities , leisure and sports , household activities in 2009 very first in the age of 15 to 19 womans spend 6 to 9 weeks in working activities and spend 6 weeks in household activities and 36.8 weeks spend in leisure and sport in the age of 20 to 24 womans spend 22.1 weeks in working activities and 32.7 weeks spend in leisure and sport and 10.0 weeks spend in household activities in the age of 25 to 34 womans spend 27.0 weeks in working activities and 28.6 weeks spend in leisure and sports and 13.2 weeks spend in household in he age of 35 to 44 womans spend 26.3 weeks in working activities and 27.4 weeks spend in sports and 16.7 weeks spend in household activites in 45 to54 womans spend 27.3 weeks in working and 32.2 weeks spend in sports and 17.3 weeks spend in household activities

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s three activities and report several figures for women aged 15–54, so the response contains relevant information. However, it covers only part of the chart: all age groups from 55 onwards and every education category are omitted. There is also no clear overview of the main patterns, such as leisure rising among older women and work generally being higher among women with more education. One figure is inaccurate: for ages 45–54, work is 27.0 hours, not 27.3. The response mainly lists data rather than selecting and comparing the most important features. To strengthen it, add an overview and summarise the major trends across both age and education groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The information follows a recognisable sequence through the age groups, and repeated references to work, leisure and household activities help the reader understand which figures are being reported. However, the response is presented as one long sentence, with almost no punctuation or paragraphing. The repeated pattern “in the age of … women spend …” makes the account mechanical, and the transitions between age groups are not clearly marked. There is also no separate overview to guide the reader before the details. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview and one or two detail paragraphs, using full stops and linking phrases such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile” to make comparisons clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic set of relevant terms, including “working activities”, “leisure and sports” and “household activities”, and the repeated labels generally make the chart categories understandable. However, the vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with “spend” used for nearly every figure. Some expressions are imprecise for a chart: “weeks” suggests the figures are weekly totals of weeks, whereas the data are hours per week. There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “womans” and “activites”, which reduce accuracy. Build a wider range of reporting language and use the unit consistently. For example, describe figures as “hours per week” and use verbs such as “recorded”, “rose” or “accounted for” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to report several pieces of information in connected clauses, but it relies almost entirely on one repeated sentence pattern. The long run-on sentence lacks full stops and commas, making the relationships between clauses difficult to follow. There are recurring grammatical problems, for example “In this graph show” has no clear subject and verb, and “in the age of 15 to 19 womans spend” has an awkward, incomplete structure. Articles and sentence openings are also not controlled consistently. Use short, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “Women aged 15–19 spent 36.8 hours per week on leisure.” Then vary the structure carefully while maintaining accurate punctuation.

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