Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrate the number of hours spent on primary activites weakly by women with various age groups and diffrent levels of education in 2009.

Overall, as for work related activites, the biggest share is for women aged from 45 to 54 and for those with bachelor's degree and higher. As for leisure and sports, the highest proportion is for for women aged 75 and over anf for those with less than a high school diploma. And for Household activites women aged 65 to 74 are the most with less than a high school diploma.

For working and work related activites, the biggest proportion is for women aged between 45 and 54 (27.3% of the total), 6.99% for women between 15 to 19, 22.1% for women between 20 to 24, 27.0% for individuals aged between 25 to 34, 26.3% for those aged between 35 to 44, women aged 55 to 64 occupated 20.9%, 6.9% for woemn aged 65 to 74. While the lowest proportion is for women aged 75 and over ( 1.3% of the total).

Regarding educational attainments, women with bachelor's degree and higher occupated 27.4% of the total, 23.3% for women with some college or associate degree, 16.7% for high school graduates. And the least pourcentage goes for women with less than a high school diploma ( 10.7%).

For sports activites, the highest share is for women aged 75 years old and over ( 51.7% of the total), 44.0% for women aged between 65 and 74, 36.8% for those who are aged 15 to 19, 36.7% for those aged between 55 and 64, 32.2% for individuals aged 45 to 54, 27.3% for the age group of 45 to 54,27.0% for women aged 25 to 34. And the lowest share goes to women aged 35 to 44 years old ( 26.3% of the total). Regarding the educational attainments, women with less than a high school diploma occupated the highest proportion with 43.1% of the total, 38.9% for high school graduates, 32.4% for women with some college or associate degree. While women with bachelor's degree were the least proportion with only 28.6% of the total.

And for the household activites, the highest pourcentage is for women aged between 65 to 74 years old (21.1% of the total), 19.5% for women aged 75 and over, 18.3% for those aged 55 to 64, 17.3% for those aged between 45 and 54, 16.7% for individuals aged 35 to 44, 13.2% for the age group of 25 to 34,10.0% for women aged 20 to 24. And the lowest share goes to women aged 15 to 19 years old ( 6.0% of the total). Regarding the educational attainments, women with less than a high school diploma occupated the highest proportion with 20.0% of the total, 18.5% for high school graduates, 16.0% for women with some college or associate degree. While women with bachelor's degree were the least proportion with only 15.2% of the total.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover all three activities and both groupings, and your overview identifies several genuine extremes: leisure is highest among women aged 75 and over, while work is highest for the most educated group. However, the overview contains a key misreading: the highest work figure by age is 27.0 hours, shared by the 25–34 and 45–54 groups, not 27.3; household activity peaks at ages 65–74, but the educational peak is also correctly identified as the least-educated group. Several later figures are inaccurate or assigned to the wrong group, such as 36.7 for ages 55–64 in leisure (the chart shows 36.2) and 19.5 for household activity among the oldest women (19.6). The chart reports hours, not percentages. More accurate selection and reporting of key comparisons would make the response more complete and reliable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for work, leisure and household activities. This makes the main categories easy to locate. However, the long activity paragraphs become lists of figures, with limited grouping or explanation of patterns. Repeated transitions such as “Regarding educational attainments” and “And for” make the progression mechanical, while “While” sometimes introduces a fragment rather than a complete contrast. The leisure paragraph also repeats the 45–54 age group and gives figures in a confusing sequence. Grouping related age ranges—for example, the rise and fall in work hours—and using clearer comparisons would improve flow and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “highest,” “lowest,” “share,” and “educational attainments,” and the reader can generally understand which activities and groups you mean. However, the range is limited by repeated use of “proportion,” “percentage,” and “occupated,” and some choices are inaccurate for this chart: the values are hours per week, not percentages or shares of a total. Spelling errors such as “activites,” “weakly,” “diffrent,” and “pourcentage” are noticeable, and phrases such as “women aged 75 years old and over” are unnecessarily wordy. Use precise terms such as “hours,” “spent,” and “recorded,” and vary the language used to describe increases, peaks and comparisons.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of sentence forms, including an overview with contrasting clauses and longer sentences that report several figures. However, control is inconsistent, and errors recur in agreement, articles, prepositions and sentence construction. For example, “The bar chart illustrate” needs a singular verb, while “the biggest share is for” is an awkwardly formed comparison. Several figure lists are joined with commas rather than being shaped into clear, complete sentences, and the opening “While the lowest proportion…” is a fragment in context. There are also inconsistent forms such as “between 15 to 19” instead of “from 15 to 19” or “between 15 and 19.” Practise accurate simple comparisons first, then combine them with subordinate clauses and check each sentence for a complete structure.

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