Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Above charts shows the different age of women doing works hour separately at 2009. If we look at the age between 15-19 , the working hour stays in 6.9 ratio, 36.8 percent in leisure and sports and 6 percent in household activities. If we look at the age between 20-24, 22.1 percent girls spend their time work related activities, 32.7 percent girls spend their time in sports while the 10 percent spend their time in household activities. If we look age between 25-34, 27 percent times females working,28.6 percent time sports while the 13.2 percent time household activities. Age between 35-44, 26.3 percent time females spends in work related activities, 27.4 percent time spend in sports activities and 16.7 percent time spend at household activities. From age between 45-54, females spends 27.3 percent time working, 32.2 percent time in sports and 17.3 percent time household activities. If we look at the age between 55-64, 20.9 percent time females spends their time at working, 36.2 percent time at sports and 18.3 percent time at household activities. Age between 65-74, 6.9 percent females spends their time at work related activities, 44.0 percent time in sports activities and 21.1 percent time in household activities. If we go above from 75 and above , 1.3 percent time at working,51.7 percent time at sports while 19.5 percent time at household activities. If we look the female age in sense of education then the female with less than a school diploma , 10.7 percent is at working, 43.1 percent time at sports and 20.0 percent time at household activities. Female with high school graduation but no college , 16.7 percent females time spend at working, 38.9 percent time they spend at sports and 18.6 percent time in household activities. Female with some college or associate degree , 23.3 percent time they spend at working,32.4 percent time they spend at sports while 18.7 percent time they spend is household activities. At last female done their graduation , 27.4 percent time they spend are at working, 28.6 percent time they spend are at sports activities and 15.2 percent time at household activities

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You report many figures from both the age and education sections, so the response is relevant and shows an effort to cover the chart. However, it mainly lists values rather than summarising the main features, and there is no clear overview of the broad patterns—for example, that leisure rises markedly among older women while work peaks in middle age, or that higher educational attainment is associated with more work and less leisure. Several figures are also inaccurate: 45–54 work is 27.0, not 27.3; the 75-and-over household figure is 19.6, not 19.5; and the household figures for high-school graduates and some college are 19.6 and 16.7, not 18.6 and 18.7. Select key comparisons and report them accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows the chart’s two categories in a recognisable order, moving through age groups and then educational attainment. This gives the reader some sense of sequence. However, the repeated opening “If we look at…” makes the account mechanical, and the long paragraph presents one figure after another without grouping related information or signalling the most important comparisons. There is also no separate overview to guide the reader. Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and paragraphs comparing the age and education data. Use linking language to show trends, such as “by contrast” or “while,” rather than repeating the same frame for each group.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “working,” “sports,” “household activities,” “age,” and “education,” and the reader can generally identify which activity each figure refers to. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural for describing time and data. For example, “6.9 ratio” and “27 percent times females working” do not clearly express hours per week, while “girls” is unsuitable for adult women. Repeated use of “spend their time” also makes the report less precise. Use the chart’s unit consistently and choose concise reporting phrases such as “spent 27 hours per week on work-related activities” or “the figure for leisure.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to use longer sentences to report several activities together, but sentence structures are repetitive and control is inconsistent. Agreement errors occur in phrases such as “females spends” and “27.4 percent time spend,” while missing articles and awkward sentence construction appear in “Above charts shows” and “If we look age between 25-34.” Commas and spacing around age ranges are also inconsistent, and many clauses are joined into lengthy sentences. These errors do not usually prevent the reader from following the figures, but they reduce clarity. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and build shorter, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb before adding more varied structures.

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