Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrate the average number of hours that women in various age group and women with varying level of education spend on primary activities each weeks

Firstly, In leisure and sports 75 and over ages Women are at the highest. 35 to 44 is the lowest in leisure and sports. From ages 15 to 19 is 36.8 , 20 to 24 is 32.7, 25 to 34 is 28.6, 45 to 54 is 32.2, 55 to 64 is 36.2, 65 to 74 is 44.0

less than high school diploma is 43.1, High school graduates is 38.9, Some college or associates degree is 32.4, Bachelors degree and higher is 28.6

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify leisure and sports as an important category and correctly report several figures, including 36.8 hours for women aged 15–19 and 51.7 hours for those aged 75 and over. However, the response is incomplete: it gives no overview of the main patterns, omits the working and household activities entirely, and does not report the 35–44 leisure figure despite calling it the lowest. The chart also compares age groups with educational attainment, but the response offers only a list of education figures without explaining the pattern. At 100 words, it is 50 words below the required minimum, with 10 copied prompt words excluded from the count. Add a concise overview and compare the key trends across all three activities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the chart, then discusses leisure figures for age groups and educational levels. The use of “Firstly” signals a start, and the figures are generally grouped by category. However, there is no clear paragraphing or overall progression, and the response ends abruptly without a summary. The long list of numbers is difficult to follow because relationships between the figures are not explained; for example, the education data could be organised to show that leisure time falls as educational attainment rises. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the main comparisons, and connect figures with clear comparison language such as “whereas” and “by contrast.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “average number of hours,” “leisure and sports,” and “high school diploma,” so the reader can identify the subject and categories. The range is nevertheless limited, with repeated reliance on basic labels and the phrase “is” to present data. Some wording is imprecise or awkward, such as “75 and over ages Women,” and “varying level of education” does not accurately match the plural groups in the chart. Improve precision by using terms such as “women aged 75 and over,” “educational attainment,” “recorded,” and “accounted for.” Check spelling and standard forms, including “bachelor’s” and “associate degree,” to make the data description clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a simple introductory sentence and short statements to report figures, but sentence structures are repetitive and control is uneven. In “The bar chart illustrate,” the singular subject requires “illustrates”; “age group” and “level of education” also need plural forms in this context. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, as in “Firstly, In” and the unpunctuated sequence of figures. Several entries are fragments rather than complete sentences, for example “From ages 15 to 19 is 36.8.” Use complete clauses such as “Women aged 15–19 spent 36.8 hours on leisure and sports,” and vary sentence patterns with accurate comparisons. This would make the information easier to read.

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