Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given bar chart illustrates the percantage of hours that women in different age group and other with varing levels of education spent in selected primary activities in 2009

Overall, it is evident that. the percentage of working and work related activities increased regularly. while the leisure and sports was slightly decline. However, the educations attainment individuals whoes complete his degree

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes a relevant attempt to describe the chart, but it does not provide a usable summary of its main features. The overview claims that work-related activity “increased regularly” and leisure “slightly decline,” which does not accurately capture the age pattern: work rises to around 27 hours among women aged 25–54 before falling, while leisure reaches its highest level among those aged 75 and over. The education comparison is left unfinished (“However, the educations attainment individuals whoes complete his degree”), and no supporting figures or clear comparisons are given. The response also contains only 61 words, well below the required 150, so the task is addressed only minimally. To improve, complete the overview and report key contrasts for both age and education groups with accurate data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by a paragraph beginning “Overall,” which signals an overview. However, the ideas do not develop into a clear progression, and the final sentence stops before expressing a complete point. The full stop after “evident that” breaks the sentence, while “while” begins a disconnected fragment rather than linking a complete contrast. The word “However” suggests a comparison, but the education point that follows is unfinished, so the relationship between ideas is unclear. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the introduction, overview and key comparisons, and connect each comparison explicitly—for example, contrast age trends with education trends.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “age group,” “levels of education,” and “primary activities,” so the topic is identifiable. However, the range is narrow and several word choices or forms are inaccurate: “percantage” and “varing” are misspelled, “the percentage of hours” mislabels the chart’s measure, and “educations attainment individuals” is not a natural phrase. The unfinished wording about people who “complete his degree” also prevents the intended comparison from being understood. Use precise terms such as “average hours per week,” “women aged 25–34,” and “women with a bachelor’s degree or higher.” Check spelling and collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a complex overview sentence, but control of sentence structure is inconsistent. “Overall, it is evident that.” is an incomplete clause because the full stop separates “that” from the idea it introduces. “While the leisure and sports was slightly decline” is also not a complete, correctly formed clause: the subject–verb agreement is faulty, and the verb construction does not express the intended trend. The final sentence fragment beginning “However” has no complete grammatical structure. The opening sentence is more complete, but the response offers little evidence of varied, accurately controlled sentence forms. Build complete clauses, check agreement and verb forms, and use a full stop only where a sentence is finished.

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