Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart displays the the average time spent by a women across different ages and educational attainment.

It is evident that leisure and sports activity takes a clear lead over here in all ages and educationl attainment ranging from 28.6-51.7 hours per week.

The chart illustrates a striking view of work related activities, as it sees a noticeable change across different ages seeing a sudden rise and fall while household activities also present same result as working activities. On contrast, work activities are higher at ages 20-64 ranging from 22.1-27.4 hours per week. Although, for educational attainment, numbers are same but college associates and bachelor's degree holders are in majority. A sudden fall of work activities and minimal rise of household activities is presented from age 65 and over, as it signifiantly falls from 20.9-1.3 hours per week.

As we compare the leading activity leaisure and sports among different ages and educational attainmnet. Consequently, it remains high across every aspect, although , a surprising number is for age 65 and over of 51.7 hours per week.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s main broad pattern: leisure and sports is the leading activity across both groupings, and work hours change substantially with age. You also include several relevant figures, such as the leisure range of 28.6–51.7 hours and the fall in work among older women. However, the account is only partly developed and some comparisons are unclear or inaccurate. For example, work among women aged 20–64 ranges from 20.9 to 27.0 hours, not 22.1–27.4; 27.4 is a leisure figure. The claim that household activities show the same pattern as work is not supported: household hours generally rise with age before a small decline. A clearer overview and accurate comparisons across education levels would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall shape: an opening, a broad overview, and further comments on work and leisure. Some linking expressions, including “On contrast” and “As we compare,” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because age and educational attainment are mixed within the same paragraph, and several points are repeated, particularly the claim that leisure remains high. Connectors are sometimes inaccurate or awkward, and references such as “same result” and “numbers are same” do not make clear which figures or groups are being compared. Organise the report into a concise overview followed by separate comparisons for age and education, using explicit references to the activity and group in each sentence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “average time,” “ranging from,” “noticeable change,” and “sudden fall,” and the reader can generally identify the activities being discussed. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the report unclear. “Takes a clear lead over here” is informal and unnatural for an academic summary, while “numbers are same” does not specify what is being compared. There are also spelling errors such as “educationl,” “leaisure,” “attainmnet,” and “signifiantly.” Aim for precise, neutral reporting language and use terms such as “hours,” “figures,” and “proportion” only where appropriate; here, “weekly time” or “hours spent” is clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “Although” and “as,” but control is inconsistent. Errors occur in basic sentence construction and agreement: “the average time spent by a women” has an incorrect article and noun form, and “leisure and sports activity takes” does not agree naturally with the plural activity category. Some sentences are incomplete or awkwardly joined, such as “Although, for educational attainment, numbers are same but…” and “As we compare the leading activity…”. Punctuation also creates problems, including unnecessary commas before “although” and sentence fragments. Use complete subject–verb structures, check articles and agreement, and divide long or unfinished sentences into clear statements.

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