Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the bar chart bellow illustrate the average moments of working in hours per week when women spent time in daily activities by different ages and educational attainment in 2009.

First, of all time the " leisure and sports" always being spent the most by women. from 15 to 44 it is tghe highest but still having a downgrade from 36,8 to 27,4 however from 45 to more it's getting more time of being the most used activities which is very relateable that from 15 to 44 is the working and studying ages in this timelapse is the best time when they have the energy to do many things.

Then, the working and work related activities is also having a great data bassed on the graph when almost all age have to do it pretty much. after that there are household activites which is always being balance between every age and didnt change too much except from 15 to 24.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify a genuine overall feature: leisure and sports take the most time across the groups, and you note that this figure falls from 36.8 hours among 15–19-year-olds to 27.4 among those aged 35–44. However, the response reports very little of the chart accurately beyond this, and it does not give a clear, complete overview of the main patterns. The claim that household activities are “balance[d]” and “didnt change too much” is misleading: they rise from 6.0 hours for the youngest group to 21.1 for ages 65–74. Working time also varies substantially, peaking at about 27 hours for several middle-age groups before falling. The education figures are not discussed, leaving a major part of the chart unaddressed. Select and compare key trends from both sections, using accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, moving from an opening statement to two paragraphs introduced by “First” and “Then.” This gives the reader some sense of how the information is being grouped. However, there is little overall progression: the first paragraph combines a trend, an age-based explanation and an unsupported comment about energy, while the second lists activity categories without developing clear comparisons. Linking phrases such as “after that” do not always show a meaningful relationship between the data. The response also lacks a distinct concluding overview. Organise the report around the chart’s main patterns—for example, leisure trends by age, then work and household activities—and use comparisons to connect the figures within each paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “average,” “activities,” “age,” and “educational attainment,” and the activity labels help identify the categories being discussed. However, word choice and spelling errors often make the description awkward or unclear. Phrases such as “average moments of working,” “a great data bassed on the graph,” and “the most used activities” are not natural ways to describe hours or trends. There are also repeated basic terms, particularly “time” and “activities,” and several misspellings, including “bellow,” “tghe,” and “activites.” Aim for precise reporting language and check spelling. For example, describe figures as “hours spent,” and use verbs such as “declined,” “increased,” or “peaked” to report changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, using forms such as “however” and “which,” but control of sentence structure is weak and errors frequently obscure the intended meaning. For example, “First, of all time the ‘leisure and sports’ always being spent the most” has an incomplete and incorrectly formed clause; “from 15 to 44 it is tghe highest but still having a downgrade” also lacks a clear grammatical structure. Subject–verb agreement and verb forms are inconsistent, as in “the working and work related activities is” and “didnt change.” Punctuation and capitalisation are also unreliable, especially at sentence beginnings. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and finite verb, and use simple past forms consistently when describing the 2009 data.

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