Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.5)

From the given graph, it is very obvious that young women aged 15-19 years are spending most of their time on Leisure and sports, as we can see in the graph: around 36.8, compared to 6.9 they spend on work-related activities and 6.0 on household activities. While looking at the trend we can see it clearly that as the age factors rises the work related time increasesd while other decreases untill we reach the old age factor 55-64 and so on it is solely because of the responsibilitites shift from younger age towards the older. On the other side where the graphs shows data based on educational attaintment we can see that as the educational degree held goes higher the work realted time increases as starting from 10.7 at less than high school mark to 27.4 at bachelors or higher mark it clearly summarize the demand for higher skills as education goes on so are the higher skills while those with lower work related time spending having more free time are definitely spending it on sports and leisure aand the household can be seen significantl low that because of independent factor involved with the attainment of education

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify two relevant patterns: leisure is the largest activity for women aged 15–19, and work-related hours rise with educational attainment, from 10.7 to 27.4. These are supported by the chart, and the opening comparison includes accurate figures. However, the age-group trend is described too broadly: work hours do not keep rising as age increases, but peak around ages 25–54 before falling, while leisure rises again among older women. The response also gives little account of household activity or the education-related leisure and household patterns. The explanation about changing responsibilities and education creating demand for higher skills is speculative rather than chart-based. A clearer overview and more balanced selection of key comparisons would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response contains relevant information and moves from age groups to educational attainment, so there is a basic sense of organisation. However, it is presented as one long paragraph, with several ideas joined into extended sentences. Transitions such as “While looking at the trend” and “On the other side” signal a change, but the relationships between points are not always clear; the final sentence, in particular, combines leisure, household activity and an explanation without a clear progression. Use separate paragraphs for the age and education data, and organise each around a main comparison followed by supporting figures. Shorter sentences and clearer links between the overview and details would improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “work-related activities,” “educational attainment,” “higher skills,” and “leisure and sports,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or informal, such as “age factor rises,” “the graphs shows data,” and “the household can be seen significantl low.” Spelling errors—including “increasesd,” “untill,” “responsibilitites,” and “attaintment”—also reduce precision. Some phrases, such as “it is very obvious” and “so are the higher skills,” are vague or awkward for an academic report. Prefer concise, chart-focused wording, for example, “hours spent on work increase with educational attainment” and “household activity declines as education level rises.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a comparison with “as starting from 10.7 … to 27.4” and a clause beginning “as the age factors rises.” However, long sentences are often joined without clear grammatical control, and some structures make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “as the age factors rises” has subject–verb agreement trouble, while “those with lower work related time spending having more free time” is not a complete, well-formed clause. Punctuation is also limited, with several independent ideas linked by commas or left in a single sentence. Build a mix of shorter, complete sentences and controlled subordinate clauses, checking agreement, verb forms and sentence boundaries.

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