Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This graph shows the work related activities,liesure and suports and household activities of women of different ages.Girls of age 15 to 19 spend much of thier time in liesure because they do not have much more important works like elder women ,from raph it is clear that they spend about 36.8 hours in liesure per week,about 6.9 hours in work per week and about 6 hours in household work.as we move forward to the females of age 20 to 24 thier work tme is increased to 22 hour,liesure time decreased to 32 hour and in hosehold activities increased to 10 hour per week.This shows the maturity in the behaviour with respect to time.as we move forward again to the age group of 25 to 34 we can notice the the change in working hours easily. we can see that liesure time is decreasd again upto 28.6 hours,wnd working time is increased upto 27 hour and household activities are also increased upto 13.2 hour .This change shows that with respect to time women realises thier responsibilities.as we mov to the age group of 35 to 44 we can notice that working activities of this age group is increased 27 hour,liesure time is almost same as previous and time for household activities is increased upto 16 hours. Age group of 45 to 54 has working time of 27.3 hour with 1 hour increased related t previous age group,but their liesure time is increased upto 32.2 hours and their time for househol work has also increased upto 17.3 hours with increase of 1 hour as previous. age group of 55 to 64 has working time of 20 hour due to over age the reduced working time,and they increased their liesure time upto 36 hour per week and time for household activities has increased 18.3 hour.By moving forward to the age group of 65 to 74 liesure time is increased to 44 hour per week , working time is decreased upto 6.9 hours and household time is increased upto 21.1 hour.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the three activities and report several figures for the age groups from 15–19 to 65–74, so the response is relevant to the chart. However, the coverage is incomplete: you omit the 75-and-over group and all four educational-attainment categories, which are a major part of the chart. There is also no clear overview of the main patterns; instead, the response moves through age groups one by one and adds unsupported explanations such as women gaining “maturity” or “realising their responsibilities.” Some figures are inaccurate, including work hours for ages 35–44 and 45–54. To improve, give a concise overview of the strongest trends, cover both chart sections, and report comparisons without speculating about causes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a recognisable sequence through the age groups, and phrases such as “as we move forward” help signal transitions. This gives the reader some sense of progression. However, the organisation is largely one long paragraph, with repeated transitions and a mechanical, list-like structure. The repeated “as we move forward” pattern does not group related information or highlight the chart’s main comparisons, and the response stops before completing the age data. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the key details, and group age trends together before comparing educational levels. More varied linking and clearer references would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use basic chart-related vocabulary such as “working time,” “leisure time,” “increased,” and “decreased,” which allows the reader to understand the general subject. However, the range is limited and repetitive, and frequent spelling errors make the writing harder to read: examples include “liesure,” “suports,” “thier,” and “househol.” Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “much more important works” and “due to over age the reduced working time.” Aim for accurate spelling and use a wider set of precise terms for describing data, such as “accounted for,” “rose,” “declined,” and “reached a peak.” Avoid interpreting the figures with vague or unsupported wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example by using “as we move forward” and clauses beginning with “because,” so there is some effort to extend sentence structure. However, the response relies heavily on run-on sentences, and errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, and verb forms are frequent. For instance, “working activities of this age group is increased 27 hour” has problems with agreement and sentence construction, while “women realises” does not match the plural subject. Commas and full stops are often missing, making several sentences difficult to process. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them accurately using a range of clauses and appropriate punctuation.

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