Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart below shows the differnet average nmbers of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities . In the age of 15 to 19 there are womens who spend time on leisure that is a good because sports are important for our physical health. But in our society some womens have no interest in games. womens can play on internationl level. In the age of 20 to 24 womens are also play games they have interest because at this age their have no responsisbilty like household responsibility . if they play games they feel proud thier country and it's like award for a country. when they are in college or school they have opportunity to play different games.

In this graph more thing is tell us that is women have more interest in games. And for playing games age doesn't matter. After age of 75 there are more numbers are women who are playing games about 36.2%. This is a good thing they can fit thier physical health. In the age of 45 to 54 and 25 their are same percentage of women its about 32% who play games. They spend less time on other activities like working work related activities and household activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes a limited attempt to describe the chart, but it largely shifts into opinions about sport, health, and national pride rather than summarising the data. It does not give a clear overview of the main patterns across both age and education groups. Some figures are misreported: women aged 75 and over spent 51.7 hours on leisure and sports, not 36.2, which belongs to the 55–64 group; and the claim that women aged 25 and 45–54 spent about 32 hours on leisure is inaccurate for the 25–34 group, whose figure was 28.6. The response also overlooks key comparisons, such as leisure rising with age in older groups and work peaking around ages 25–54. Focus on accurate figures and chart-based trends, without personal commentary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is some basic sequencing through references to age groups, and phrases such as “In the age of 20 to 24” and “After age of 75” help signal the topic of each point. However, the response does not develop a clear progression from an overview to supporting comparisons. Ideas about leisure are repeatedly interrupted by comments on games, health, college, and national pride, so the reader cannot easily follow a data summary. The final sentence introduces work and household activities without providing a clear comparison or linking them to the earlier figures. Organise the response into a short overview followed by grouped comparisons, and use linking language to show how the figures relate rather than repeating general claims about sport.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The response uses a small range of relevant chart vocabulary, including “leisure,” “household responsibility,” and “working work related activities,” so the general subject is usually recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise: “games” is used where the chart refers to “leisure and sports,” and “percentage” is incorrect because the figures represent hours per week. Several spelling errors, including “differnet,” “internationl,” and “responsisbilty,” also reduce accuracy. Some phrases, such as “more numbers are women,” are difficult to interpret naturally. Build a more precise set of terms for describing data, such as “hours,” “category,” “rose,” “declined,” and “accounted for,” and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer sentences, for example, “In the age of 20 to 24 womens are also play games they have interest because at this age their have no responsisbilty,” but these constructions are often difficult to follow. There are recurring problems with verb forms and agreement, as in “womens are also play” and “their have,” as well as sentence boundaries and punctuation. The opening also contains an incomplete or awkwardly formed description, and several clauses are joined without clear grammatical links. Simple sentence patterns are more successful, but the range remains limited and accuracy is inconsistent. Practise forming clear subject–verb sentences, then combine them with accurate clauses using “while,” “whereas,” or “compared with.”

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