Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart illustrates the average number of hours per week that women in various age groups and educational backgrounds spent on three main activities.

Overall, younger women spent more time on leisure and sports while older age women spent more time on leisure

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the chart’s subject and begin an overview, but the response stops before reporting the main features or making meaningful comparisons. The statement that younger women spent more time on leisure is not supported by the age data: leisure rises to its highest level among women aged 75 and over, while the youngest group records 36.8 hours. The following phrase, “older age women spent more time on leisure,” is incomplete and also repeats the same point rather than summarising another trend. There is no discussion of working hours, household activities, or educational attainment. The response is also substantially below the required 150 words. To improve, give a complete overview and select key figures to compare across both age and education groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The opening sentence gives the reader a clear indication of what the chart covers, and “Overall” appropriately signals an attempt to introduce the main trends. However, the response ends midway through its overview, so there is no progression from an introduction to a summary and supporting details. The second sentence repeats leisure as its focus and does not develop a distinct comparison. There are no paragraphs or linking expressions to organise the chart’s two categories—age and educational attainment. Plan a short introduction, an overview of the most important patterns, and separate detail paragraphs for the two groups. Use comparisons to connect figures, rather than leaving the reader with an unfinished statement.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to identify the chart and its subject, using phrases such as “average number of hours per week,” “age groups,” and “educational backgrounds.” “Three main activities” is a concise way to refer to the chart’s categories. However, the very short response gives little evidence of range or precision, and “spent more time on leisure” is repeated without specifying the comparison or activity category fully. The phrase “older age women” is also an awkward description; use “older women” or “women in older age groups.” To demonstrate stronger control, use accurate terms such as “working-related activities,” “household activities,” and “leisure and sports,” alongside comparative language like “rose,” “declined,” and “was highest among.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The first sentence is a complete, understandable sentence, and the past-tense verb “spent” is appropriate for data from 2009. The use of “Overall” also shows an attempt to structure a summary. However, the response contains only two sentences and offers little evidence of varied sentence structures. The second sentence is incomplete: “while older age women spent more time on leisure” leaves the contrast unfinished, and the comparison is not expressed clearly. Although the basic meaning can be followed, this limited sample does not demonstrate consistent control across a range of structures. Write complete sentences that state both sides of a comparison, for example by contrasting leisure time with working hours, and check that each clause has a clear subject and complete idea.

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