Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart provides the information about average number of hours that women in multiple age groups and their different levels of educational spending on primary activities each week.

Overall, the age group 75 & over is most spending time on (leisure and sports) activity, and the same age group are lowest counted at (working and work related activities) and they counted as a (less than a high school diploma). The highest counted numbers for (household activities) is 65 to 74 age group.

In terms of lowest counted numbers for (working and work related activities), which are 1.3 for (75+ over), 6.5 for (65 to 74), 6.9 for (15 to 19). and highest for for this activity, around 22 to 26 fo

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify relevant categories and include a few figures, such as 1.3 hours for women aged 75 and over in work-related activities. However, the response reports only a small part of the chart and does not provide a clear, accurate overview of the main patterns. The claim that women aged 75 and over are “counted as a (less than a high school diploma)” confuses the age and education groups, while the highest household figure is 21.1 hours for ages 65–74, not a clearly stated comparison. The response also ends mid-sentence and contains fewer than the required 150 words. To develop the summary, compare both age and education groups and report the main contrasts across all three activities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introduction is followed by an overview and then a paragraph beginning to discuss work-related activities. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview combines unrelated age and education information, and the final paragraph stops abruptly at “around 22 to 26 fo”. Repeated bracketed labels and phrases such as “for this activity” do not clearly connect the comparisons. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and key details, and group related figures logically—for example, age patterns first and education patterns second. Clear linking phrases such as “By contrast” can help show comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “average number of hours”, “age groups”, “educational” and the activity labels. However, the range is limited and several phrases are awkward or unclear, such as “most spending time”, “lowest counted numbers” and “highest counted numbers”. Repeating “activity” and “numbers” also makes the description imprecise; the chart reports hours, not counts. Aim for accurate reporting verbs and comparison language, such as “spent the most time”, “recorded the lowest figure” and “rose to”. Use the chart’s category names consistently, and avoid unnecessary brackets around labels so that the wording reads naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt an introduction, an overview and a longer sentence with a relative clause, but sentence control is inconsistent. For example, “the same age group are lowest counted” has faulty agreement and an incomplete grammatical construction, while “the highest counted numbers … is” mismatches a plural subject with a singular verb. The opening phrase “women in multiple age groups and their different levels of educational spending” also makes the relationship between women and education unclear. Punctuation is unreliable in the list of figures, and the final sentence is unfinished. Practise complete subject–verb structures, for example, “Women aged 75 and over spent the least time working,” and check agreement and sentence endings.

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