Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given chart describes how different age groups of women and women with varying education level spent their primary activity each week in 2009.

Overall, in all the women spent more in leisure and sports in both categoties. While work related activites are least performed by all. Every lady do hold hold activites wheater she was young or late and uneducated or a graducate.

In age groups womens are divided by 5 years from 15 years old to 75 and above. The interest of leisure and sports shows a bell shape which means that youngs one are more and then gradually decline with age until 45 and in again starts increasing to above 50 hours a week.

While in education category this trends shows more interset in less education, with increase in degree this trend declines. The work related activies illustrates opposite to previous trens.

While for hould hold it is less in youngers and starts increasing and stayes between 10 to 20 hours a week throughout all groups.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s broad subject and make an effort to summarise patterns across both age and education groups. The comments that leisure rises again among older women and that household activity generally increases with age are relevant. However, the overview contains a major inaccuracy: leisure does not follow a bell shape, since it falls from 36.8 hours among 15–19-year-olds to 27.4 among 35–44-year-olds, then rises to 51.7 for women aged 75 and over. The claim that leisure is greatest for women with less education is broadly supported, but the work trend is only described as the “opposite” without figures or explanation. Select the clearest comparisons and report them accurately, including the peak and low points, to make the summary more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate comments on age, education and household activities. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and several linking words do not establish a precise relationship. For example, “While in education category this trends…” begins as a dependent clause but is not clearly connected to the following idea, while “The work related activities illustrates opposite to previous trends” leaves the comparison vague. The overview also combines several points without clearly prioritising them. Use complete topic sentences and connect each comparison explicitly—for example, contrast the age pattern in leisure with the education pattern—so cohesion feels less mechanical and references are clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “leisure and sports,” “work related activities,” “education category,” and “hours a week,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or repeated expressions make the description less clear. “Every lady do hold hold activities” is difficult to interpret, and “interest of leisure” is not a natural way to describe time spent on an activity. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “activites,” “wheater,” “graducate,” and “interset.” Aim for precise, conventional terms such as “women,” “household activities,” “time spent,” and “educational attainment.” Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating “trend” when a more exact description is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast beginning “While…” and a relative clause in “Every lady… whether she was young or late…”. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, verb forms and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “Every lady do hold” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, and “The work related activities illustrates” also mismatches subject and verb. The sentence beginning “While in education category…” is incomplete as written, and “in again starts increasing” has an unclear structure. Practise building accurate comparisons with a clear subject and verb, such as “Leisure time decreases until the 35–44 age group, then rises.” Use a wider range of structures only when you can maintain grammatical control.

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