Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.0)

That bar chart give information about the different women working activities in a week in the side of primary education.

that bar chart show the age of 15to 19 years age women has been worked 6to 9 hours and his results is 36.8 %.The next week 20 to 24 years age women 22.1hours in this week in this period have low progress mean 32.7%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes a limited attempt to describe the chart, mentioning the 15–19 and 20–24 age groups and some figures. However, it does not summarise the main features or compare the three activities, and it omits the education categories entirely. Some data are also misrepresented: 36.8 is the number of hours for leisure and sports, not a percentage or a “result,” while 6.9 hours is reported imprecisely as “6to 9 hours.” The chart’s broader patterns—such as leisure rising among older women and work peaking in middle age—are not identified. The response is 64 words, below the required 150, so it cannot provide the coverage needed. To improve, include an overview and select accurate comparisons across both age and education groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic sequence: the response introduces the chart and then refers to two age groups, with “The next” attempting to connect the second point. This gives the reader a small amount of progression. However, the ideas are not organised into a clear summary, and the second sentence combines several figures without explaining how they relate. The phrase “in this week in this period” is repetitive and does not clarify the comparison. There is also no concluding overview or paragraph structure to guide the reader through the chart. A clearer approach would be to use a brief introduction, an overview of the main trends, and separate details for age and educational attainment, linked with precise comparison words such as “whereas” and “by contrast.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “bar chart,” “age,” “women,” “hours,” and “primary education,” so the topic is generally recognisable. It also attempts to describe change with “low progress,” showing an effort to interpret the figures. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “working activities” does not clearly express the chart’s category, “in the side of primary education” is unclear, and “his results” is unsuitable for describing women’s data. “Low progress” also does not convey a comparison in hours. The vocabulary is repetitive and does not distinguish work, leisure, and household activities consistently. Use the chart’s category labels and precise terms such as “time spent,” “weekly hours,” “increased,” and “declined” to make comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts connected sentences and uses some basic present-tense forms, for example, “That bar chart show the age…” and “The next week… women 22.1hours.” However, sentence structures are very limited, and errors in agreement, articles, and verb forms make the meaning difficult to follow. In “That bar chart give information,” the singular subject requires “gives”; “women has been worked” is not a correct verb construction; and “his results is” has both pronoun and agreement problems. The second sentence is also a fragment rather than a complete comparison. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use simple accurate patterns such as “Women aged 15–19 spent 6.9 hours working and 36.8 hours on leisure.”

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