Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the mean of hpurs women spent on different activities and education in 2009.

Overalll, the age group 75 and over recorded spent most hours in leisure and sports than other groups. Furthermore, the group of 55 to 6 give more time to household activities and 45 to 54 spent most in working respectively. The rate of education was peaked in less than a high school diploma.

The 15 to 19 group spent more time in leisure and sports while the 20 to 24 also play sports more than other activies. Whereas. 25 to 24 clearly seen spent more time in sorts but slight less in working. The 35 to 44 age is same as the previous spent more time in sporta but just less in working. The groupnof age 55 to 64 . 65 to 74. 75 and more were also more busy playing sports.

In terms of education. the women with less than a high school diploma recorded spent most time in sorts. on the other hand high also give more time to sports while women with associate degree also play sports more and women with bachelors degree play sports as well as working just less than sports.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s broad subject and mention relevant categories, including leisure, work and household activities. However, the response reports very few accurate comparisons and does not give figures to support its claims. Several statements misread the data: women aged 55–64 did not spend the most time on household activities, and women with less than a high-school diploma did not spend the most time on leisure; the highest leisure figure is for those aged 75 and over. The overview also says the 45–54 group spent the most time working, although the peak is 27.4 hours among women with a bachelor’s degree or higher. To address the task more fully, give a clear overview of the main patterns and select accurate figures from both the age and education sections.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an opening, an overview-like paragraph and separate paragraphs for age and education, so there is some attempt to group information. However, progression within these sections is difficult to follow: the age paragraph lists groups without a clear organising comparison, and the education paragraph repeats that each group spent more time on sports. Linking is also sometimes confusing, as in “Whereas.” and “on the other hand,” which do not clearly connect the ideas that follow. Some references, such as “the previous,” are unclear. Organise the details around the main trends—for example, how leisure changes with age, then how work varies by education—and use linking words only where they express a clear relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “leisure and sports,” “household activities,” “working” and “education,” and the reader can generally identify the chart’s subject. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or repetitive. “Play sports” does not accurately describe the chart’s broader leisure-and-sports category, while “the rate of education” is unclear for educational attainment. Repeated use of “give more time” and “spent more time” also makes the account imprecise. Spelling slips such as “hpurs,” “Overalll” and “activies” further weaken control. Use the chart’s category labels consistently and choose precise terms such as “hours devoted to” or “time spent on.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including “Whereas, 25 to 24 clearly seen…” and “In terms of education…,” but many sentences contain errors that make relationships or meanings difficult to follow. For example, “the age group 75 and over recorded spent” combines verb forms incorrectly, and “the group of 55 to 6 give more time” has problems with the subject and verb. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, particularly in “Whereas.” and the fragmentary list of age groups. Aim for complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check tense consistency and punctuation. A few accurate comparative sentence patterns would make the data easier to understand.

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