Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar illustrates average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week in 2009.

Overall women spent most of their time in lesuire and sports in each age group, While time spent on work releated activities it varies on age gorups as 15 to 19 spended few time and it peaked in 45 to 54 as well as two younger age group than this just short behind and lastly househould activities peaked at age group of 55 to 64 with two age groups before that just a bit short behind in educational attainment of 2009.

firstly women at age group of 15 to 19 spended 6.9 hours for wort while shocking 36.8 hours for sport activites with 6 hours for household activities, While two age groups of 25 to 24 and 25-34 in that first group spended 22 hours for work while other spended 27 hours per week, also they spended 32.7 hours for first group for sports while other spent 28.6 with 10 hours for first group for household while 13 hours for the second group. After that four age groups of 35 to 44, 45-54 55-64, 65,74 lastly 75+spended 26 hours for first group to 1.3 hours for last group at massive fall for work, while 27.4 hours for first group to 51 hours shcoking for last group lastly 16 hours first group to 19 hour last group for house hold.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s general subject and note some valid age-related patterns, including the high leisure figure among the oldest women and the rise in household activity into older age groups. However, the overview is incomplete and partly inaccurate: leisure is not highest in every age group, since work exceeds leisure for women aged 25–34, 35–44 and 45–54. The claim that household activity peaks at 55–64 also misses the higher figure for ages 65–74. Most importantly, the educational-attainment data are not reported at all, despite being a major part of the chart. Several age-group figures are also confused or only loosely described. To improve, give a balanced overview of both categories and select accurate comparisons from each.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response with an introduction, an overview and a detail paragraph, and words such as “Overall,” “firstly” and “After that” signal stages in the discussion. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the final paragraph combines many age groups and three activities in one long sequence. Phrases such as “two age groups of 25 to 24 and 25-34” make the comparison unclear, and “first group” and “other” do not consistently identify which age group or activity is meant. The overview also runs several ideas together. Use separate paragraphs for age and education, and group figures by activity or by clear age ranges, with explicit references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “average number of hours,” “peaked,” “massive fall” and “household activities,” so the reader can recognise the topic and intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the account harder to understand, for example “lesuire,” “wort,” “spended,” “shcoking” and “househould.” Some expressions are also imprecise for data description: “shocking” is subjective, while “just short behind” does not clearly state the size or direction of a difference. Aim for accurate, neutral reporting language and use terms such as “rose,” “declined,” “recorded” and “approximately” to describe figures and trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and uses some linking clauses, but sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make relationships between figures unclear. For example, “While time spent on work releated activities it varies” lacks a grammatical main clause, and “women at age group of 15 to 19 spended” has an incorrect verb form and awkward sentence pattern. The long sentence beginning “After that four age groups…” also lacks clear punctuation and becomes difficult to parse. There is some control in simpler statements such as “The bar illustrates average number of hours…,” but articles, agreement, verb forms and sentence boundaries need more consistent attention. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then add comparisons using accurate clauses.

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