Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

THE BAR CHART ILLUSTARES THE NUMBER OF HOURS REGARDING DIFFRENT TYPES OF WOMAN WHO SPEND IT ON PRIMARY ACTIVITIES EACH WEEK IN YEAR 2009. IT DIVIDED IN TWO CATOGRIES FIRST ONE WAS WOMAN WITH DIFFRENT AGE GROUPS AND OTHER ONE WAS WOMAN IN EDUCATIONAL SACTORS. THERE WERE THREE TYPE OF ACTIVITES, WORKING & WORK RELATED ACTIVITIES, LEISURE AND SPORTS AND, HOUSEHOLD ACTIVITIES.

ON ONE HAND, THE HIGHEST WAS 36.8% IN THE AGE GROUP OF 15 TO 19 AND IT FOLLOWED BY 32.7% IN 20 TO 24 YEAR'S WOMAN AFTER TAHT, IN THE AGE GROUP OF 25 TO 34 AND 35 TO 44 THE AVERAGE WAS ALMOST SAME AND IT WAS 28%. IT CONTINUED WITH 32% AND 36% IN 45 TO 54 AND 55 TO 64 YEAR OLD WOMAN. THE HIGHEST PERCENTAGE WAS IT 75 YEARS OLD WOMAN, IT WAS 57.7%.

ON THE OTHER HAND, THE HIGHEST PERCENTAGE WAS IN HIGH SCHOOL GRADUATES AND IT WAS 38% AND THE LOWEST WAS FOLLOWED BY BACHLOR'S FEGREE. AND OTHER TWO HAD ALMOST SAME PERCENTAGE WHICH IS 35%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the chart’s two groupings and names the three activities, but it does not adequately summarise the chart as a whole. Most figures discussed appear to refer to leisure, yet this is never made explicit, and the account omits the working and household activity data almost entirely. Some details are inaccurate: leisure for women aged 75 and over is 51.7 hours, not 57.7, and the age-group figures are hours rather than percentages. The education comparison also misstates the pattern: leisure is highest for women with less than a high-school diploma (43.1), not high-school graduates, while the two remaining groups are not both about 35. A clear overview of the main trends, followed by accurate comparisons across both categories, is needed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic organisational framework: an opening paragraph introduces the chart, and the next two paragraphs use “On one hand” and “On the other hand” to separate age and education. This gives the reader some sense of the intended comparison. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because the activity being described is not identified, and the age figures are presented in an order that makes the trend unclear. The final paragraph is especially brief and does not explain how the education groups compare. Use a clear overview and organise details by activity or by grouping, with accurate linking phrases such as “By contrast” and “Meanwhile” to show relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “age group,” “educational” and “primary activities,” and it attempts to describe comparisons with phrases such as “the highest” and “almost same.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning unclear: “ILLUSTARES,” “DIFFRENT,” “CATOGRIES” and “SACTORS” are examples. Some expressions are also imprecise for this chart: “percentage” is used repeatedly even though the figures are hours, and “types of woman” does not accurately describe the categories. Build a reliable set of terms for reporting data, including “hours per week,” “leisure time,” “household activities” and “educational attainment,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can generally recognise the intended comparisons. However, control is inconsistent, particularly in sentence construction and agreement. For example, “It divided in two catogories” lacks an appropriate passive form, while “the highest percentage was it 75 years old woman” has an unclear structure. The sentence beginning “And other two had almost same percentage” also lacks an article and has an incomplete comparison. Several clauses are joined without clear punctuation, and tense shifts between “was” and “is.” Practise accurate comparative sentence patterns, such as “Leisure time was highest among women aged 75 and over,” and use consistent past tense when describing the 2009 data.

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