Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

As far as,this bar chart description is concerned the given bar chart represent the number of hours,age group and levels of educations thats spend on primary activities in each week.15 to 19 years old women working on different variation; 6.9 women did working and work realted activities,36.8 women do leisure and sports and 6.0 women do household activities.Among 20 to 24 years old women their working and work related activities ratio is 22.1,leisure and sports ratio is 12.7 and household activities ratio is 10.0, There are many different ratios in this bar chart highest ratio of working and work related activities is 27.4, their age is above 25 or their eduactional level is higher.On the other hand lowest ratio is 1.3, their age is above 75. However, the highest ratio of leisure and sports is 51.7, between 75 or above year old women. Their lowest ratio is 27.4 and their age is between 35 to 44.Last one is the is household acitivies is highest value is 21.1.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s three activities and report several accurate figures, including 6.9, 36.8 and 6.0 for the youngest group, and the peak leisure figure of 51.7 among women aged 75 and over. However, the response only partially summarises the chart: it gives little coverage of most age groups and education categories, and there is no clear overview of the main patterns. One important figure is misreported: leisure for women aged 20–24 is 32.7, not 12.7. The claim that the lowest leisure figure is 27.4 also misidentifies the age group; the minimum is 27.4 for ages 35–44, but this comparison needs to be stated clearly. Include the broad trends and compare key highs and lows.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response contains relevant information and uses basic sequencing signals such as “Among,” “On the other hand,” and “However.” These help distinguish some comparisons. However, the information is presented as one long, crowded paragraph, with no clear overview followed by organised details. The discussion jumps from the youngest age group to ages 20–24, then to maxima and minima across activities, making the overall progression difficult to follow. Several transitions are also awkward or unclear, particularly “Last one is the is household activities.” Group the information into an introduction/overview and focused detail paragraphs, and use comparisons to connect related figures rather than listing them in a shifting order.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “working and work related activities,” “leisure and sports,” “household activities,” and “highest” and “lowest.” This gives the reader a basic understanding of the categories and comparisons. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive: “ratio” is used for hours, “women did working” is unnatural, and “different variation” does not express a clear comparison. Spelling errors such as “realted,” “eduactional,” and “acitivies” also reduce precision. Use the chart’s unit, “hours per week,” and vary reporting verbs and comparison language. More accurate vocabulary would make the figures easier to interpret.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine information in longer sentences, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “the given bar chart represent” has subject–verb disagreement, while “women thats spend” has an incorrect relative form and verb agreement. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also poorly controlled: several figures run together without spaces or full stops, and the sentence beginning “There are many different ratios” continues into an unclear comparison. The final sentence, “Last one is the is household activities is highest value is 21.1,” is difficult to parse. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons, checking agreement, articles, verb forms and punctuation.

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