Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph illustrates the information comparison between the women's activities and the educational attainment of specified age groups in 2009. The comparison made in following categories of working, leisure, sports and household activities. Overall, the women aged 75 and above experienced a dramatic incerased in leisure activities and spent fifty-one point five hours per week, while other in contrast observed a gradual decline to forty four and around thirty-six hours per week by women aged 55-74 respectively. Moreover, aged 15 to 24 showed more interest in work related activities and spent just thirty-six and thirty-two hours per week.

On the other hand, women showed lack of interest in household activities, beacuse graph approximately remained stable for all aged group.

On the other hand, graph accounted for approximately fouty three percent of women, who had a school diploma and thirty-eight percent were high school graduate and a major decreased has been observed by the women who were graduated with bachelor's degree, and same for the assosiate degree

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify leisure as a prominent activity for older women and mention the high figures for the oldest age groups, so some relevant features are present. However, the response only minimally summarises the chart and includes important misreadings: the 15–24 age groups did not spend the most time working; their leisure figures are about 37 and 33 hours, while work was 7 and 22 hours. Household activity did not remain stable across all ages, rising from 6 hours among teenagers to about 21 among women aged 65–74. The education figures are also described as percentages, although the chart reports hours per week. Select the main patterns accurately and compare both age and education groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and using phrases such as “Overall” and “On the other hand.” However, ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: age-group observations, household activity and educational attainment are mixed or introduced without a clear relationship. The repeated “On the other hand” does not establish a meaningful contrast, and the final sentence ends without completing a clear comparison. Separate the overview from the detailed comparisons, then group the age data and education data into distinct sections. Use linking phrases only when they accurately show how the next point relates to the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “leisure activities,” “work related activities,” “household activities” and “educational attainment,” which helps identify the chart’s categories. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or awkward: “experienced a dramatic increased” does not describe the data naturally, “showed more interest” interprets the figures rather than reporting them, and “forty three percent” mislabels hours as percentages. Spelling errors such as “incerased,” “beacuse,” “fouty” and “assosiate” also reduce precision. Aim for accurate chart-reporting language and check spelling; for example, describe figures as hours spent rather than as interest or percentages.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and uses some subordinate structures, such as “while other in contrast observed…” and “who had a school diploma,” but these constructions are often faulty or incomplete. For example, “The comparison made in following categories…” lacks a finite verb, while “graph approximately remained stable for all aged group” has problems with articles, word order and plural agreement. The final sentence also joins several ideas without a clear grammatical structure. These frequent errors sometimes make the intended comparisons difficult to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses, checking that each sentence has a clear subject and verb and that nouns and verbs agree.

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