Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart represent the average hours spent in selected primary activities,by age and educational attainment,2009.

Overall,the bar chart represent the involvement of women in activities including working and work related activities, leisure and sports, household activities,by their age.There is mostly seen increase in the household activities from age 15 to 75 and over

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and gives one broad observation: household activity generally rises with age. However, it does not summarise the main patterns across all three activities or compare the age and education groups, and it provides no supporting figures. The overview is also incomplete: for example, leisure reaches its highest level among women aged 75 and over, while work peaks around ages 25–54 and among degree holders. The response contains 46 words, well below the required 150; this severe lack of development leaves the task only minimally addressed. To improve, write a clear overview and select several accurate comparisons from both sections of the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence: an opening sentence names the chart, followed by an overview beginning with “Overall”. This gives the short response a recognisable start and a general direction. However, there is no developed body paragraph, and the ideas are too limited to show a clear progression through the chart’s age and education data. The overview also shifts from activities generally to household activities without explaining how this relates to the other categories. Build a simple structure with an introduction, an overview, and one or two paragraphs grouping key comparisons. Use linking expressions to show contrasts and trends, rather than relying on a single transition.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses relevant topic vocabulary, including “average hours”, “primary activities”, “educational attainment”, and the category names “leisure and sports” and “household activities”. These terms make the subject understandable. However, the range is narrow because the response is very short, and “represent” is repeated rather than using more precise reporting verbs. The phrase “involvement … in activities” is also less natural for describing time spent, while “There is mostly seen increase” does not express the trend idiomatically. Use concise chart language such as “spending time on”, “rose steadily”, “peaked at”, and “was higher than” to describe the data accurately and avoid repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both a simple opening statement and an overview, and the main meaning can be understood. However, the sentence structures are very limited, with no developed comparisons or complex clauses to demonstrate range. There are also noticeable accuracy problems: “The bar chart represent” has subject–verb disagreement, and “There is mostly seen increase” is an awkward and incomplete construction; it needs an article before “increase” and a clearer grammatical pattern. Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and a stray full stop on a separate line. Practise accurate reporting structures such as “The chart shows that…” and “Household activity increased from… to…”, checking agreement, articles, and sentence punctuation.

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