Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In some areas, being obese is regarded a problematic issue as it takes you to major health concerns. However, some people argue that junk food advertising is the major cause behind this issue and it should be banned. But some others think that consumption of junk food is completely a personal choice so advertising shouldn't be banned. In my opinion, being obese is somehow your personal choice and food brandings shouldn't be banned.

In the first place, the most pressing reason behing people putting on weight is sedentry lifestyle.There are many people who have a bad habit of not having a proper meals in a day such as lunch or dinner but eating little bit snacks in multiple times of day and sitting or lying down for whole day which involves no physical activity. Having less physical movement causes less burning of fat and slows digestion process which coverts into obesity. I have a living example in my own house as my brother got on extra weight becuase of this particular reason.

In addition to the previous point, another irrefutable cause is none other than junk food. The current generation is becoming too lazy that they don't cook food in their homes but order processed from food from restaurants as ordering online food has become too easy that is just a click away. But it still remains a personal choice and we should avoid junk or processed food as it is one of the major reason behind obesity.

To recapitulate, after considering the above arguments, we can say that being obese is significantly a personal choice, no one can force you to eat fast food and gain weight until you cannot have a control on your own self. So, we cannot blame restaurants advertisments a reason behind obesity of masses.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear personal view that obesity is largely an individual responsibility and that advertising should not be banned. You also identify relevant factors, including inactivity and frequent consumption of processed food, and the example of your brother helps make one point concrete. However, the task asks you to discuss both views, and the argument that advertising should be banned is not really explained: you mention that some people blame it, but do not show how advertising might influence eating habits or why this view is persuasive. Your own position is also simplified into personal choice, without considering how advertising may shape choices. Develop both sides with specific reasoning and evidence to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Phrases such as “In the first place,” “In addition,” and “To recapitulate” signal the stages of the argument, and the ideas about inactivity and food choices are grouped into separate paragraphs. However, progression is limited because the first body paragraph discusses lifestyle rather than the opposing view about advertising, and the second repeats the personal-choice position without building a balanced discussion. Some links are awkward or unclear, such as “which coverts into obesity,” and the conclusion largely restates the introduction. Use paragraphing to present each side distinctly, then connect the evidence to your final judgement.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “sedentary lifestyle,” “physical activity,” “processed food,” and “major health concerns.” These choices make the general subject clear, and you attempt some more formal expressions such as “irrefutable cause” and “recapitulate.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, including “food brandings,” “order processed from food,” and “blame restaurants advertisments a reason.” Spelling errors such as “beh ing,” “sedentry,” “becuase,” and “advertisments” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural phrases—for example, “food advertising,” “order processed food,” and “blame restaurant advertising for obesity”—and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “as” and “which,” and most of the main ideas remain understandable. However, errors occur across sentence structures and sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For example, “There are many people who have a bad habit of not having a proper meals” has an article and plural mismatch, while “which coverts into obesity” does not form a clear grammatical connection to the preceding clause. The sentence beginning “The current generation is becoming too lazy that…” also needs a more accurate comparative structure. Practise checking subject–verb agreement, articles, clause links and punctuation, and use shorter sentences when a longer structure becomes difficult to control.

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