Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In some places such as major problem. Few people trust that fast food advewrtising is largely for issue and should be allowed. While other people think that junk food marketing does not contributes of excess body fat and should not be banned. Whereas i concede that to many benefits of junk food so we advertsting should be allowed in any places. I will discuss both view and in my opinion.

A key argument, junk food is very important of life. so many benefits in the these food because used fast food and compulsary in any place.Mostly people like fast food because one of the best thing that fast food available in every area. Thertefore, firstly big benefits save the time because this food is ready in some time. who's people use this food that mostly job holderand students. For instance, to much famous cheezious brand of fast food i think that almost 20 branches so easily available in any ares of lahore. and other brand of fast food located in lahore. nowadays made a trend in any city some happyness celebration use a fast food. like birthday and aniversiary and other speciall days.

An the other hand, some people believe that can some drwabacks.Junk food can create some problems in human body. so, To much people avoid from junk food. Firstly, some people thinks that one of major issue that, wastetd of money. secondly fast food is not digested quickly. Afert that jund food can cause create some diseases which dengerous of human body. For example, few months ago my best friend take fast food almost 10 days regularly. after that, he became ill when he chacked the doctor thats time he was very feel illness because eat fast food in daily base. So, he has gained a lot of weight. now his health is not good.

In conclusion, fast food have many benefits that save of time but other side some disadvantages like wast a money and un health food.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to discuss both views and give a position: the opening says advertising “should be allowed,” while the conclusion mentions both convenience and health disadvantages. However, the response does not directly explain whether advertising itself contributes to obesity or why it should or should not be banned. Most of the first body paragraph focuses on fast food’s availability, convenience, and use at celebrations, rather than the argument about advertising. The opposing paragraph gives relevant health concerns and a personal example, but the link between these points and advertising remains unclear. Your opinion is also difficult to follow because the introduction is poorly expressed and the conclusion does not clearly restate your view. Develop arguments that address the precise question and support each side more directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly separate benefits from drawbacks. This gives the reader a basic structure. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first moves from convenience to local restaurant branches and then celebrations without showing how these points support the advertising debate. Linking phrases such as “A key argument,” “An the other hand,” and “So” are sometimes inaccurate or do not clearly connect the ideas. Several sentences are fragments or run together, which further weakens the flow. Aim to give each paragraph one clear central argument, arrange supporting points in a logical order, and use transitions that express the actual relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “junk food,” “advertising,” “diseases,” “gained a lot of weight,” and “save the time.” However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice problems that make parts of the response hard to understand. Examples include “advewrtising,” “drwabacks,” “dengerous,” and “un health food.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “very important of life,” “wastetd of money,” and “in daily base.” These errors sometimes strain the reader’s understanding, rather than simply making the writing less polished. Build a small set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and collocations; for example, use “convenient,” “health risks,” and “regularly” in appropriate contexts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form longer sentences and use connectors such as “because,” “while,” and “after that,” but control of sentence structure is very limited. Errors are frequent and sometimes distort meaning. For example, “junk food marketing does not contributes” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “some people thinks” also uses the wrong verb form. The opening contains incomplete or confusing constructions, including “In some places such as major problem” and “I will discuss both view and in my opinion.” Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also often inaccurate, as in “one of the best thing” and the run-on sequence about the friend becoming ill. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses, checking agreement, verb forms, and punctuation.

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