Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In some societies obesity is regarded as a major problem. Everbody have his own opinion regarding any topic.At very fisrt i want to discuss both sides of the topic.

Junk food contributes to major health issuses in some peoples opinion.It can cause many diesases in the world.People believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem should be banned. Because in todays world everbody is using social media so their is a large number of advertising ads available their which people saw and think to order that product at any hour of the day that is not a good impact on peoples health.

Some people thought that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.Suppose if a person crave to a item which contribute to fattening so he order that food item without seeing any advertisment so in that case advertisment contribute to nothing thats completely relay on a persons requirment.

Its quiet hard to give an opinion because it can cause controversy in groups.So according to my opinion obesity can be mainly occured due to advertisment as i mentioned above that in todays world everyperson is using social media and there is a lots of advertisment of junk food available there which can be easily accsesed by any age group person at any time, When they saw that ad they divert their mind towards that junk food and order it without going to the market.Its quiet inconvenient in my opinion junk food advertisment should be banned.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state your own opinion: you explain that advertising can encourage people to order junk food, while someone may buy it because of personal cravings regardless of advertising. However, the discussion is only partial and the ideas remain under-developed. The second view is presented as a brief hypothetical rather than supported with a fuller explanation or example, and the claim that advertising is mainly responsible is repeated without evidence. Your position is also hesitant at first (“Its quiet hard to give an opinion”) before becoming clear in favour of a ban. The response is 220 words, so it is 30 words below the 250-word minimum; 40 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each view with a specific example and explain why your position follows.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each view, and a concluding opinion. This helps the reader identify the main stages of your answer. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several ideas are repeated, particularly the point that social media advertising is widely accessible and can prompt orders. Linking is also sometimes mechanical: “Some people thought” introduces the opposing view, while “So according to my opinion” begins the conclusion without clearly building on the discussion. Some sentences run together or are separated awkwardly, which interrupts the flow. To improve, organise each body paragraph around one main claim, explain it, and add a relevant example; use clear references and a smaller range of purposeful transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general argument, including “obesity,” “junk food,” “advertising,” “health,” and “crave.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as “advertising ads,” “that product,” and repeated references to “junk food.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, including “Everbody,” “diesases,” “advertisment,” and “accesed,” which can slow the reader. Some collocations are unnatural, for example “a large number of advertising ads available there” and “obesity can be mainly occured due to advertisment.” Build a more precise set of topic phrases and check spelling; for instance, describe advertising as “promoting energy-dense foods” and explain that it may “influence purchasing choices.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional example beginning “Suppose if a person…” and a reason clause explaining how an advertisement may affect a viewer. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. Agreement and verb forms are problematic in “Everbody have his own opinion” and “obesity can be mainly occured”; sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “At very fisrt i want to discuss both sides of the topic.” Articles, plurals, and sentence construction need more reliable control, and some long sentences contain several ideas without clear grammatical links. Practise writing shorter, accurate sentences first, then combine them using correctly formed clauses. Proofread for subject–verb agreement, verb forms, capitalisation, and full stops.

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